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Into The Woods

Into the woods

where lay blood percussionists

slamming away
sniffing my cortex
seek stop frame
fear severe unto pain

slither behind succomb

to sleep

riding a mare of the night
a moon sucked filly
oozing silver light
brimstone sparks from hoofstrikes

Into the night

sought by stealthy
slinking grim
licking the ground
where my sole
has been

shadows an echo
of the absence of light
a vacuum of black
sucks up my fright

gruesome vampire
shade feeds on mind
capering evil
a ballroom of graves

rictus looms
a mummified grin
saxaphone licks

haunt the wind

oaken talons
snag clothes and hair

lost to the woods

disappeared
 

something
licking chops

guteral smack
sibilant whisper
 
            mmm
                 ssssoooo
                          ggooood

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option 1 DK akaLunaticSerene

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  • Asylaarix
    July 18, 2007

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    First off ... I absolutely loved the background to this write ... it fits very wonderfully into the poem itself ... anyhow ... they worked well together ... secondly ... I had to read this write at least three times ... and every time I read this ... it got more and more amazing ... you left me speechless ... the first two times i was like what? lol ... and each time I read it ... my mind was like a playground ... you toyed with my emotions well with this ... and as I read it one final time ... the imagery was so clear to me that I just was .... flabbergasted ... thank you so much for your entry ... it was beautifully penned ... and creepy nonetheless ... much luck to you in the contest


    Much Luv
    Smile, It Confuses People
    Sparkeh


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 10, 2007

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    Your work seems to carry very strong undercurrents, some requiring more than one read! Like this one! A dip in the dark pool, the background is stunning and inspiring in itself! Excellent penning! Excellent, I found it creative and unique ~tia


  • Creatress silver member
    March 28, 2007

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    What a masterpiece of fright! You gave me the willys! The background really adds to the mood. I am a big fan of good backgrounds. You showed a great vocabulary that adds to the greatness. Love it,

    Creatress


  • DarkenedAuras
    March 19, 2007

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    eww

    man this is creepy and haunting and the picture just made it 100 times moreso...I like it...lots of neat descriptions I agree with Talking Toni (it felt like I was walking through the woods as well) very well done


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    February 10, 2007
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    I really like the backround that you choose to use its beautiful and dark. I also liked the poem you wrote it was very well written you are very talented. Keep writting your great at it! Thank you for entering our contest and good luck

    ~Chrissy~


  • PerfectImperfection
    January 13, 2007
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    The background works so well with this piece! Creepy crawlies out of the woodwork emerge! OH MY! Very creative use of imagery - well articulated and formed with a nice flow throughout! Thanks so much for entering DK! Best wishes!


  • Talking Toni gold member
    December 31, 2006
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    Scares Me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    This is very vivid imagery, you had me walking through the woods scared to death!!!I hope you do well in this contest!!!I love the background picture it fits perfectly with this write!!! Thanks for sharing!!! Toni


  • Princessdove
    December 31, 2006
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    very entertaining. I love the artwork


  • Robin Candor
    December 31, 2006

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    I applaud your effort to compose a write for this contest. It is out of my genre and you did quite well according to what I understand of it. I hope you do well in it. You have captured the fears of most folks I know regarding the woods. Of cousrse I would be the predator so it would not bother me. RC


  • grannyeri gold member
    December 31, 2006

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    When I saw the title it reminded me of doing a skating solo in the ice carnival to the song Teddy bear's picnic - about going into the woods tonight. This is much more dark and deep - well written, flows well and tells a story that we hope we never have to live through. Excellent descriptions and flow - wonderful words used to relate the acitivities going on.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    December 31, 2006
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    since i have the most horrid panic attacks when i am out in the woods--this was a bit eerie. described what i am thinking when i manage to take the first step beyond the gravel road. thank you for showing me--in writing--the thoughts. good luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie

  • lightwing
    December 31, 2006

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    Good luck in the contest. Your words really captured a nice eerie quality with a touch of fantasy. I really enjoyed and loved the background you chose.

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