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Ritual -silver

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I allow a chunk of dry hair
to fall into the fire as a shadow
slips over the soles of my feet
to kiss the lamplight and make it his
while I, shrouded in black,
step away to lick a silver blade
that will take the last finger joint.
After the fire feasts on it,
I will take the last ash to make clay
to block tears that might cut
a new course down my cheeks.

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D.r.e.a.m.c.a.t.c.h.e.r

Some Native American grief rituals included cutting of hair, off part of digit, and rubbing ashes on face and arms.

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  • Nights Aikata
    January 3, 2007

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    Wow! That is really cool. I never would have known... great write! And you picked a perfect picture to go with it as well. Best of luck in the contest!


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      January 5, 2007
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      tk u, Nights Akita. We still ahve symbolic grief rituals that we do...in fact, one that is new and so like them, is tht they call Wakes...awakes....


  • TommyTRASH
    January 2, 2007

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    *Shudder* Amazing! You've written a very good poem here, it fits the contest perfectly. As does the picture perfectly fit the poem.

    Great stuff...good luck

    Shady Lane


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      January 5, 2007
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      Thank you Shady Lane. There always seems to rise a time and place for me to share my culture.


  • Heart Sutra
    January 2, 2007
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    This is excellent. I cannot add anything more to it or to my comment. Good luck in the contest.


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      January 5, 2007
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      Thank you, Zayra. If our youth only understood what what they do symbolizes so much that was so sacred.


  • Night Hope gold member
    December 31, 2006
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    What a powerful penning, my Friend...We all have our own personal rituals for dealing with grief...even if the severing is only emotional, rather than actually being physical...Good luck in the contest, Sweetie... Wanda


  • singer in the rain
    December 31, 2006
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    woah

    wow. thats eerie. i mean its good and its got a very interesting topic but its still eerie. ((the picture is too)). i really think that you might win the contest your in! its actually a really good poem though! muy bien great diction too.

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