Virgin Grace.
I want to feel your feathered lips
Sweep delicately upon my face
While I close my eyes and our hearts eclipse
In a Celtic knot embrace.
We’ll float and sail within this ship
On a voyage to never replace
And we’ll anchor our hearts with a sturdy grip
Lost in love without a trace.
From this vessel I’ll slowly sip
The sweet wine of virgin grace
Intoxicated by her loveliness
I fall spent…
content…
within her trance
In her eyes I’ll forever gaze.
In a list
A contest entry
- BLOW MY MIND UP by Swan song.
1000 points, ended August 26, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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From this vessel I’ll slowly sip
The sweet wine of virgin grace
Intoxicated by her loveliness
I fall spent…
content…
within her trance
In her eyes I’ll forever gaze.
nice poem here dear poet -
Do we have a crooner here or what! This contest has given me some excellent entries and this will be very hard. I must read this peice again.
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"From this vessel I’ll slowly sip
The sweet wine of virgin grace"
This is excellent.
Thank you so much for entering, as I would've lost my rag completely if I hadn't found a good write.
Finalist.
Thank you for entering again!
x
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several things i like about this write from you. one is the rhyming and how smoothly it flows, without sounding a bit forced. secondly, is that it took me back to a time centuries gone. i suppose the celtic thing did that for me. my favourite part is:
From this vessel I’ll slowly sip
The sweet wine of virgin grace
Intoxicated by her loveliness
it just sounds so romantic.
thank you for entering this raven qualifier and i wish you well in this contest as well as with love in your life. viyanna rosemarie -
Beautiful. Flows well and the rhymes tie together in trance with the words. Thank-You for entering Prewrites, I wish you my best.
~Ryan~ -
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Thanx for comment friend i'll take it and save it for futures encouragement.
Slán Dolores xx
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This is a very pretty and well thought out poem; congrats on the previous silver trophy. I like how you don't exactly come out and tell us whether you're talking about a ship or a person, but the meaning of this poem is impossible to discern. Thanks for entering the contest!
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I would be willing to bet that, that was one cup of wine too many. Been there, done that as I am an alcoholic.......Bob 42
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NICE WRITE
I FOUND THIS TO BE A AWESOME PIECE OF POETIC PENNING. YOU DID IT UP RIGHT!
KEEP ON PENNING
POETDONTKNOWIT -
The lovliness of your prose...
Darling
I sense you write
from your deep ramparts
of your lips flight
over oceans of heart.
Smoosh
Janet
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pretty. A lovely little love poem...and the image of a ship is a good one.
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CONGRATULATIONS
THIS IS TRULY A WORTHY PIECE..
WOOW..
Just listen to this:
I want to feel your feathered lips
Sweep delicately upon my face
While I close my eyes and our hearts eclipse
In a Celtic knot embrace.
We’ll float and sail within this ship
On a voyage to never replace
And we’ll anchor our hearts with a sturdy grip
Lost in love without a trace.
What a brilliance of thought, what a spark of creation.
You are a very gentle and beautiful person Lady Ireland.
This poem has touched my heart.
Be well,
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I love the ocean and so many mystical things it possesses.. I also love your poem as it just if filled with such beauty that it the imagery that it possesses paints a wonderful tapistry within my mind. YOu are such a gifted wrtiier. Congratulations on your silver trophy. It is well earned with this poem.
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Congratulations!!
I'm so happy you won a trophy in this contest!!! You're very deserving!!!! 
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I love the rythm and rhyme and can imagine the joy of ocean sailing. Wishing you a happy new year!
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Majestic
This poem is brilliant the diction and imagery could not be better you are like the female WB Yeats,well done keep it up! -
FANTASTIC
Your writes are always so eligant, like penned silk, wow...
good luck in the contest, this is awesome
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Excellent
You are so magical in your words, Like always I move away with a smile on my face and a warth in my heart, Such a gift, Write on poet
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Bliss!
This is truly a wonderful write. You have such a wonderful ebb and flow with this piece. I truly feel like I'm being taken on a journey. Just lovely Dolores! Thank you so much for sharing this with us. All the best!
~Elora~
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very good
Years back, I sailed. Your words bring memories.
Good job! jc
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WOW!!!
What astounding and very original, beautifully sentimental writing, Delores!! I love it!! Good luck in this contest,
I hope you win!!! CHEERS!!!!
Your Sincere Friend, Rose of Ireland
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