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~* Untouchable *~

 



Full moon baths red carpeted

castle entrance aligned

with glowing torches



Ballroom finely dressed,

guarded by knights of

valor, greeting the

guests of this

masquerade

ball



Illuminated elegance

spun from crimson

tapestries hung

trimmed in

gold



Glorious trumpets bellow,

announcing royalty's

arrival at the

staircase's

archway



King's magical hand stands

to right with eager ears

awaiting the cause

for celebration



Attentive silence falls from

the lips of anxious guests

for the King's

honorable

respect



Proudly spoken is the

name of honor that

has been granted

sole rights to a

delicate hand



Maiden's tears spill as eyes

look past her designated

future to see her

heart's desire

suited in

armor



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'colleen was here'

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  • Sokarjo
    February 15, 2007

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    Oh how entrancing... so very beautiful and touching... you make me care so little for rhyme, my dear. This is so lovely! Thank you so much for sharing it with me.


  • crystallynnbradford
    February 9, 2007

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    I'm lovin it

    I really love this poem. I think that this is great and I enjoyed reading it so much, by the way, the picture was a very nice touch.


  • Cr187
    February 6, 2007

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    Beautiful, god, wow. It's almost exactly like I wanted, buutt you forgot the authors comment, so I'd hurry and put that up or I'll have to DQ you and I wouldn't want to do that to a good poem.


    • Celticmoon
      February 6, 2007
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      I was in the process of adding it when you commented


  • Melodies
    February 2, 2007
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    A gorgeous poem!

    WOW... such beauty!


  • Aidenn
    January 28, 2007

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    First of all, thank you for entering my contest. I really appreciate it, and I wish you the best!

    This is a beautiful write. I loved it. A beautiful and timeless romance...marvelous!


  • Black-Moon
    January 21, 2007

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    This is a beautiful poem. It has great imagery. I love the way you write, and the font. Good job!
    Love, Black-Moon


  • Daoine
    January 2, 2007

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    Past lives getting you down

    How do I put it in words how beautiful the wording, imagery and feelings are within this poem? It's perfect, hun.

    Shalli


  • B Chandler
    December 31, 2006
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    Thoughts

    The aspects of memory are one and the same --as this write proves it. The write spoke highly of life of someone telling a story without really sounding as if they're telling the story. strong usage of words too

    Much love


  • Providence
    December 31, 2006

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    QOnderful romantic imagery of accepting tradition despite the longings of the heart!
    Great timeless romance.
    Beautiful for a lonely night!
    Marianne

  • HeartBreakinSilence
    December 30, 2006
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    i love the imagery! really good poem


  • December 30, 2006

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    awesome

    i love that her hearts desire is suited in armour, yay for knights! beautiful format and lovely in every respect it was a pleasure to read.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    December 30, 2006
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    untouchable?!?!?!?! I'll reach out and smack her lovely romantic old day piece with lovely images and flow.... well done, My lionesss

    Love,
    Master


  • lavender shadows
    December 30, 2006
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    Oooooooo, perty picture!

    Awwwwwww, this is so sad. In your heart, you want to be with someone, but circumstances disable that possibility for you. Too many can relate to this. 'Tis what I feel from this.

    Very prettily written, Mom. I very much love this.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    December 30, 2006
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    Beautifully written, sweetie! Love everything about this!
    Wishing you all the best,
    Sandy

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