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I'm in love with you

The sun is out,

The birds are chirping,

But all I see is you.



Your eyes are exquisite.

Your hands are soft, but manly.

Your face is kissed by the sun.



I feel the words coming to my mouth,

But nothing comes out.

Why can't I tell you how I feel?

Why is this so hard?



Your voice could bring Angels to their knees.

I can't get away from your beauty.

I can't escape the fact

That you are oblivious.



You see me everyday

And yet

You don't know.

The time we spend together is so precious.

I wouldn't give it up for anything.



Why can't you see what I am trying to tell you?

I can't hold this in anymore.

I have to let you know.

I feel there is no other way

But to yell it out.



I'm in love with you!

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This is about the the love of my life..even if i did tell him that i love him

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  • broken.inside
    December 21, 2007
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    could you put your age in your authors notes please. its only fair to the other authors who have entered my contest, thank you .


  • IamRemy
    December 4, 2007

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    The ending was a good wrap for the poem. That line made me smile.

    One suggestion though, If you from "manly" to "masculine" it would seem more concrete.

    If you disagree, no hard feelings


  • golden-red
    May 7, 2007
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    very good!
    good luck in the contest

    I'll coment to more if i have time two.....


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    May 6, 2007

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    Thank you for your entry

    ahh a love that is not been fully declared. A secret hearts desire. Words yet unspoken. You should tell him. You may find out he feels the same I can certainly relate to this one.

    Thanks for the read and good luck.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    May 5, 2007

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    YAY

    I love this poem so much now i'm listening to that song by aerosmith - i don't wanna miss a thing, i love it and i love all your poems


  • neenabean
    May 4, 2007

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    a lovely poem, however it wasnt excatly what i was looking for, sorry!
    maybe you could reread the contest page ?


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    April 26, 2007
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    a beautifal write
    which really expresses your love for each other
    another mazing write


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    April 20, 2007

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    What a beautiful write!
    Sometimes it's so difficult to express
    your heart and soul to that special
    someone, especially when they are right
    in front of you. All of your emotions
    start to explode within you, but somehow
    something deep inside of you captures it
    all and swallows it whole.

    I do hope that you learn to let go soon
    and let this special person know how much
    he means to you. I wish you all the best
    with it and hope that everything works out
    for you! I really enjoyed reading this
    and all of the emotions in it.

    Well done and thanks for sharing it here!
    Best of luck to you with it in the contest!



    Jeremy0826


  • Paulies Cracker
    April 20, 2007

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    this is wonderful!!! i really enjoyed reading this... i got this huge overwhelming feeling inside me... good luck in the contest and thank you for entering.


  • Dark Whispers
    April 17, 2007

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    awwww this was a sweet little poem, the power of love and the emotions of it to are a included in this poem. great write.


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    April 11, 2007

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    awwwww this was such a great write...this was a very powerful and emotional write..i very much enjoyed reading this poem..keep writting you are very talented

    ~Chrissy~


  • Heavens Child
    April 3, 2007

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    This simply lovely. Telling someone you love them can be a difficult thing. We means we have to take risk and put our hears on the line. Thank you for your entry in my contest.

  • broken.inside
    April 1, 2007

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    my sister, Flaming-FireAngel15 makes a really good point, your poem has amazing flow and speaks to everyone who has felt as if the one they love doesn't know they exist. However I got the feeling you only kind of got the point of this contest, the part that says 'But all i see is you', it relates to the topic of loyalty but the rest doesn't exactly say loyalty in love. I love your poem, I really do but I don't think its right for this contest.


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    April 1, 2007

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    I realy enjoyed reading this. I wonder why these few little words are so difficult to say.
    you did an excellent job of reminding us all how important those few words are.
    Thank you for entering and Good Luck in the contest.


  • Hearts.That.Bleed
    March 31, 2007

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    great poem

    this poem really says the meaning behind those three words that it seems have faded from mankind's vocabulary. this poem brings it back. Wonderful flow, thank you for entering and goodluck


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    February 12, 2007
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    Sometimes, we're terrified to say those three words but when we get up the courage and we realize that it can be returned, it's awesome! I much enjoyed this poem; thank you so much for sharing! All the best!

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