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Broken

I have no best friend
  to comfort me.
She has no love for
  me, you see.
I placed such faith
  in what we'd be.
The loss of "we"
  has broken me.

Please tell me what you think

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  • cherche -d -ame
    January 9, 2007

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    you said a lot in very few sad words. I liked the way the rhyming was done as well with emphasis on the letter E.
    reenie


    • HsiaoKuo
      January 9, 2007
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      Thanks for finding something nice to say about it. I know the rhymes, like the emotions involved, are simple and kind of childish, so I do appreciate your comment.
      ps. Love your icon!

      • cherche -d -ame
        January 10, 2007
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        I do not believe that it was childish at all....it was the way our minds think at times and then you found a way to put it into a rhyme form. A write does not always have to be "perfect" to be appreciated by someone else.
        best wishes,
        reenie