Listen
how bout that
i just leave
leave you
leave this world
leave everyone
i just leave
I'll just go
Walk out of the chatroom
and upstairs to my room
and cut my veins
would you be happy then?
i guess not
but are you happy now?
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I can follow the flow
This flows really well and ends with just enough to leave me wondering?. so what happened.
I like it a lot
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My way or the highway! lol
I feel ya~
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This is really good. I love the end.
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Three words:Life Insurance...policy?whatever.you make me cry.these tasty words turned to salty water and splashed all over my eyes and now i cant see...good poem.nice flow and love the raw fu-ck you in your face emotion.quit thinking about suicide though...its not legal anymore.says who you say?this legal document.
SUICIDE IS ILLEGAL.
signed and authorized
by the one and only
SHI
keep it up love.
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I know, I know, same over here...but how would they punish you?
Well, I gave up cutting and suicidal stuff ages ago but the cutting came back and now I'm scared to wear short things and bikinis...if I dare wearin' those 
But I still love you and the comment you made just cheered me up 
At least one boy cares about me
Love you,
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As short as this is
its a really good write
though it felt that you were venting
like you were really angry and just went
"listen ... you don't want me here ... ok .. goodbye"
awesome write
i think I might just write something like this
great inspiration
I'll show u it ... when I've made it
(if it doesnt suck)
now lemme stop writing ... before my comment becomes longer than your poem
NeveR ♥
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that was emotional... it was really sad.... i have an idea... how about i CASTARATE who ever masde u feel like this... yea... thats an idea
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This is so sad . You have captured the emotions very well in your poem. I especially love the end of your poem :" would you be happy then?
i guess not
but are you happy now? "
Well done.
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Hehe I wrote that poem when I was in the chat room with you and Annie, a long time ago That's where the line about the chatroom comes from Luckily, I feel much better now...this guy just makes me HAPPY. i mean, happy enough to stop me biting nails and happy enough by saying “Now we're friends and you're not going to do those things anymore.“
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sad and deep and thoughtful.
this short piece hits hard.
wonderful job.
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wow, it is kind of speratic and not very oranized and kind of spontanious but i like the emotion. cool...
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dont be sorry at all. i liked it, it was good. and i hope you dont do that hunni. its hard but you shouldnt.
i like this bit the best
"I'll just go
Walk out of the chatroom
and upstairs to my room
and cut my veins"
very weel done.
love you, take care
XoXoX
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This is a great poem! Could be a song maybe if you made it longer...
But I like it the way it is... very expressive...
Keep up the great work!
Annie
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awsome awsome awsome
omg this was such a great read.. i havent talked to u in a while ... i've been really busy, and i havent gottne online much so i thought i'd drop in read poem or 2 and leave some comments... i really liked this poem... this part was my favorite (yes.. all of it... lol )
Listen
how bout that
i just leave
leave you
leave this world
leave everyone
i just leave
I'll just go
Walk out of the chatroom
and upstairs to my room
and cut my veins
yea so incase ur wondering this is tummy hor...and Emo baby well i've change my name again... right now its keeper of wolves.. hey i just thought of something... since i'm not in school you're prollu in school... lol so neways... great write
the keeper
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WOW,
this is sad!!! and really good great job though good flow in words like you siad it really come together.
janet
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