You came out of nowhere.
I wasn't ready for you.
Never thought I'd get this way.
The very first time I first saw you.
Something about you made me look twice.
Talking to you made me realise.
You have the eyes and you have the smile.
Suddenly this place doesn't seem so dull.
But here I go again belittling myself.
What's inside of me can't be inside of you.
They say plenty of fishes in the sea.
Yet each one of them doesn't have to be me.
Being in my skin my own true signature.
Unspoken words of two tangled butterflies.
Failed attempts to hear your laughter.
To catch your gaze mine shy, careful and eager.
Such could all be for nothing or for everything.
Being in your presence is such sweet serene.
Parting may be such sorrow and sweet.
But uncertainty, it's such a natural beauty.
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Option 4.
A contest entry
- Ten Options by sweetpearl.
690 points, ended January 1, 2007, 12 entries
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It wasn't the kind of love I was looking for but it's not badly written. I was a little confused with this line:
"catch your gaze mine shy"
--do you mean your gaze is shy? Possibly a sort of punctuation or rewording could make it sound easier and less awkward. Thanks for entering. -
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yes lol i was going for something different but i guess it's not to your liking. no problem. and yea, that line is what you thought it was but that's exactly how i wanted it. thanks for the comment and the contest.
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