Raindrops falling from above
Convergence of the sky and earth
I'm caught in the middle like a slur
Try as I might for it to become clear
How far are you from where I stand
Where does it begin and where does it end
Ask me now if there is a plan
But what does it matter if you are not there
You come and you go as you know please
This story of a dream within a blurry dream
Faint as it is but I have to believe
Let the rain attempt to rinse my heart clean
Pieces of clouds can only glide so far
Like looking at love while seeing a mirage
Majestic colours but still merely a collage
The perfect imperfections of the phantasmagoria
Across the sky now that there is sight
Where the sun awakens from the night
Gradual emergence with the rays of light
The beams that bring with them new life
But getting to you is like catching a rainbow
Your evanescence is what I fear may follow
Thus I wait at the opposite end of this rainbow
And know that I will catch you should you choose to fall
Catching a rainbow in this dawn of a December
Thrill of the thrill I know isn't the answer
Nothing is gained if nothing is ventured
Brings forth the glimmer in this dusk and winter
Author notes
option a)
A contest entry
- Spill your Heart # 2 by hand-in-hand.
525 points, ended January 8, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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that was really good and it made me hink deep i really like your closing paragraph and if their is an end of the rainbow your poem is the pot of gold
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Rainbows- A promise of eternity. You have founf the end of the rainbow with this creative poem filled with fantastic imagery! I really enjoyed reading this poem. Thank you for sharing it with all of us.
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But getting to you is like catching a rainbow
Your evanescence is what I fear may follow
Thus I wait at the opposite end of this rainbow
And know that I will catch you should you choose to fall
good lines here, the poem was a little hohum to me. Did't really catch me and move me. You could probably revise it and give it some shine quality thought. Keep writing it will come together.
Becky
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hey thanks for letting me know you didnt enjoy it. writing about hope is something new to me. maybe next time then. thanks again.
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I don't believe I responded that I did not like it, I simply stated it did not grab me right off. It is a good poem.
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ah, it was my respond that was off. i did get what you mean.
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You have a rich pot of gold going on with your end of the rainbow, nice alliteration in this and I hope she manages to find you at rainbows end, what a nice way to think of finding love.
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Well Written!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is very well written!!! Your rhyme scheme is also right on!! Your words are very wll thought out andtake the reader just where you want them to go along with the imagery-fantastic!!!You did a great job all through this piece and I thank you for sharing!!!!!!!!!!!!Toni
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