You hanged him
telling he kiled many.
Laws are made for
the sake of someone.
But who will make laws
for the sake of the innocents.
Mothers.......
hold on your littleones firmly.
hide yourself in tunnels,
missiles are fitted here and there,
bombs are yet to be dropped.
Monarchs laugh with,
red wined lips.
Brains are fumed in labs,
not for the poor,beggars
patients or destitutes.
BUT..
to kill them.
As flies are for boys
they kill them for sport.
sowing wind they reap storm.
so the generation to come
can laugh at them.
Look-
it is better to be
blind deaf and dumb.
A contest entry
- Your BEST Prewrite! - For Mike [degarmo] - by Never Fall in Love.
950 points, ended October 29, 2007, 130 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sad depressing morbid poems by Chrissi.
300 points, ended November 20, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I enjoyed this poem, but I do not see a bronze trophy attached. maybe I didn't explain properly, but you need to have a bronze trophy. if you did win one, please send me the link so I can judge you. thanks!
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I can see how you could come out with this. Death is wrong always. We will all be judged one day and it won't be by a human hand!
peace and love
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enchanting. They should have hanged Bush also. Only my opinion. smile
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This is such a powerful write I really enjoyed it.
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I hate violence of any kind...I think I was an alien who wad acidentally left here in this mees we call civilization. LOL...grat write...expressive of you true
feelings.
Blessings~
Az
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you didnt tell me why you wrote it
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thank you for sharing your talent with me through this wonderful write. i wish you well in the contest that we both have entered. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Deep into the killing..Loved the conflict raised and how you put it into words...
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Good write
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I appreciate your willingness to tackle the psychic questions raised by this terrible conflict.
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woooooooooow this was deep i specialy liked the part about the boms. wooooooooow i specialy liked the part u 4got 2 mention the funiest part of the sadam hangings was that 3 kids thought it was fake n hang emselfs 4 fun!!!! lets hang rselfs it will be fun kram u go fist!!!
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only kids think of hanging....ya !
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omg htanks i guess il go 2 a farm n smoke tercabo now
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Universal impression
Very expressive poem composed by Kram as deep imotional fact of the world's event to the nature and existing sorrow of humanbeings successfully.
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Incisive
Intense write. I can relate. I was never one for the death sentence. How can we remedy murder by legalising murder as well.I never take killing lightly..I so value life. One reason why I left a very promising career in the armed forces.. -
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very true
I agree with you . And happy to know that you have your own principles.
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very sad
I think you did a good job on this trying to convey your point. Myself, I think he died the way he lived. His people called him a martyr but anyone that knows the truth knows there is no way on God's green earth that saddam was a martyr. Murderer was more like it to me.
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thank you
I value your openion, and congradulate you for expressing your thoughts
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I would say intence, but so as everyone esle so it was very hard hitting
. I liked the message through out to ba dthe rest of thew rold has not yet cme to the realisation of it all. so sad
Thankyou
Mollxxx
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very happy to read that you liked it
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The event affect brain
Your poem is beautiful satire to ourselves, how future generation cope with it. You should be proud of your poem.
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Thanks a lot
for your such comments
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Your poem is beautiful slap to ourselves. How the future generation follow it. We have to wait and see.
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It hunts in the brain
Yes, it's great event which makes poem where you penned beautifully. It will affect for great generation and we have to go on again and again... but, it won't care human problem. What's the solution.
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Wow.
This piece is so intense. I love it. Love everything about it. This poem is flawless in my eyes.
Great work~Mia
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Mia
oh is it really flawless?
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Sadly True
It is extremely intesnse and very thought provoking writing. You might want to feature this poem for it's worth it. The simplicity that spreads the ugliness of today's world's complexities is amazing. The flow & the tone of disgust is brilliantly crafted to say the least. Very powerful message that must be spread...to make us realize where we are heading towards...straight down on a fast lane to hell. Take Care & God Bless
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thank you
Lets hope the world will change
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I agree with you, the message is intense, and we need someone to step up and change the world soon, or I think we will end up going down the drain. I've been asking myself if killing him is the right thing to do lately...I myself, don't know...I used to say yes, but now that I've thought about what some kids at school said, maybe it's not...he died a martyr...why should we give him that? again, very strong message, I agree with you on your opinion.
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good think
it is better to know how you think, thank you for the comments
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Very intense write. True, I hope your message somehow reaches the right place. I hate the condition of the world we live in today, and I am tired too...
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Thank you
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