Time turns
Bends and curves
Until the motion
Makes you sick
Time learns
Just what hurts
So it can bring it back
Again and again.
Time laughs
Cause you can’t go back
To relieve the guilt
It continuously buries.
Time stops
With your last heartbeat
You stop feeling the pain
When it’s buried six feet deep.
A contest entry
- ~~Invite Only~~Invite Only~~ by Black Raevyn.
600 points, ended January 6, 2007, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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My step dad's comment to most of my problems is "put time on it". I've always found this to be so true. Your poem sums up this small phrase with vast meanings and comfort. What ever comes about may seem bad today and yet tomorrow the calamity or sadness or whatever that is endured but seems unendurable subsides. Thanx for a wonderful write Terrel
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wow. wow, wow, wow, wow and HOLY SHIT WOW. This is a truly amazing piece you've written here. The short stanzas make every word like a punch in the face...but in a reality-check sense. I love it. Short title, short stanzas, each one more powerful than the last. Truly awesome, and I swear I'll be thinking about this a year from now.
...To my bookmarks it goes. Keep writing.
MORSMORDRE!
- The Dark Lady
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wow still got it i see. you and riki were always so much better at poetry then me, well i hope you have a wonderful new year
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Nicely done. Time can be such a killer can't it. Sometimes I wish I could go back to change things I have done, but as you state in the 3rd stanza, you can't.
"Time laughs
Cause you can’t go back
To relieve the guilt
It continuously buries."
Good job and good luck.
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