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Ode to a Flame

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Ode to a Flame 

 

As I look into your heart

I see the color blue

Extending from the start

I see red and yellow too

 

You dance in ambient air

and flicker in the night

You show me that you care

with a soft and loving light

 

You give comfort in the storm

by showing me the way

Your essence is so warm

you turn the night into day

 

As I ponder on your glow

I think of my true love

I pray that you should know

you’re a gift from far above

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Lone Defender
    February 4, 2007

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    Very pretty...eloquent simplicity. I loved this write.

    Do me a favor and toss the number of the option you used into your Author's Notes.

    Thank you for entering my contest, and best of luck to you!


  • Ryno
    January 31, 2007

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    Hmmmmm, It seemed as though some of your verse were a little forced. You had some good writing here, though, great flow. Thanks for entering Prewrites.
    ~Ryan~

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    January 28, 2007

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    very nice job here, this was a pure pleasure to read.
    best of wishes to you in the contest dear!
    Suzi


  • Manoura xx
    January 24, 2007

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    you know....i was reading this poem over...and i thought that you can make this into an amera styled poem...great job..BYE!!!!!!!


  • PerVirtuous
    January 19, 2007

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    Beautiful sentiments. I seem to remember writing a similar poem at the request of someone who escapes me...


  • sweetpearl
    December 31, 2006

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    The rhyme fits well, nothing too obscure but the way you phrase each word is remarkable. This is the kind of love poem I like to read ... it's not about a person (at least what I got from it) so it seems true. I love:

    "I see the color blue
    Extending from the start
    I see red and yellow too

    You dance in ambient air
    and flicker in the night"

    So pretty.


  • Tercil gold member
    December 30, 2006

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    Enrichment of the senses!!

    And so the thought goes on to earthly love that this affection may progress to heavenly love, soul mates forever in fact!!!


  • Jarrod
    December 30, 2006

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    well when I clicked this poem, I thought it was going to be about a fire so to speak, but it wasnt literally, but I do however like this poem! I like how you took someone special to you and made them a flame, the characteristics are great, although be careful because sometimes flames can be blown out!! keep the flame alive! great write


    • Amera gold member
      December 30, 2006
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      Thank you, you’re very intuitive.

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