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The Blessed Gypsy

The candles light up
And glow in the dark
While this blessed gypsy
shares her heart

The ribbons around her
start to unfold
While people passing
tell stories untold

The blessed gypsy
fills the air
with warm thoughts and love
And deep gleeful care

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  • coolchick
    January 23, 2007
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    good

    This is a cute write...it has good flow to it, it reminds me of a nursury rhyme.>>>coolchick<<


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 10, 2007
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    Beautifully done. This is well written and flows smoothly. Excellent job here. I think you could easily expand this is you wanted to, but I do like how the reader can draw their own surroundings and incorporated them as well. Great job!


  • Elfin
    January 2, 2007

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    a lovely sweet little poem which leaves me wondering who the gypsy is sharing her heart with. Well done and good luck in the contest. Elfin

  • Northern Downpour
    December 30, 2006
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    Good job! You described the gypsy well. Not much to say here but... THIS ROCKS!

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    December 30, 2006

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    terrific

    Awww how nice. You talk about this gypsy in such a kind way. That's so sweet. I like this poem very much. Thanks for sharing it; you did a fine job. \
    Brian


  • darkshadows21
    December 29, 2006

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    this is really well done. but why is the gypsy blessed? overall this is a great poem.
    good luck in the contest and keep up the good work

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