It was the loudest thing in the world
And it startled me
The clattering of my teeth
As I sauntered down the street
At 4 a.m.
I could see my steamy breath
Between each drag of my cigarette
And my tired lungs embraced every single particle of death
But I was very much alive
That morning
Please tell me what you think
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Very nice mother!
Short and sweet!
It's very nice!!
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Been there and done that!
This makes me shudder just to think of the 4 am cold you speak of. I don't usually wake until 1 pm because of 2nd shift work at the nursing home.
I love these lines here:
"And my tired lungs embraced every single particle of death
But I was very much alive
That morning"
Great job!
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Wow.
This reminds me of the good old days when I smoked and dated someone that lived out in the country.
I miss it.
Beautiufl.
~Restless and True~
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This is really cool. Very picturesque and mysterious...it's enticing, really. Makes me feel like I should have been there. Great write!
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Very GOod
Hey old Friend
How you been haven't heard or seen u on much these days its good to see a new poem by you that tells me you are still alive lol I been ok been under alot of stress but i'm good tho..Hows's your sister last time i spoke to her she told me she was writing me back that letter i sent to her a while ago last year lol Did that mean you guys didn't like me as a friend or something to not rewrite back cause at first it didn't seem like that but losin all touch with you both made me wonder if that was what you both were trying to say to me. Well i hope im wrong cause u both were cool as hell and i hope to see u on aim,msn ,or even yahoo i do have new addy's My Yahoo is Chucker.Marks@yahoo.com...Msn-Cm550661985@hotmail.com Or Aim which is Evilabyss619
Talk to u later your old friend Charles
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