I met a boy
In whom I found a treasure
Adoration
Too divine to measure
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He turns away
I fear he'll not believe
So I hold his faith
And try to take the lead
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So young a heart
Too wise, his mind
A beautiful soul
That's destined to shine
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I know his hurt
In this world of pain
Too many wrongs
That just stay the same
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All the sadness
In what we cannot change
Feeds his inner fire
Fuels his inner rage
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Precious boy
I kiss your tears
At your side
If you need me here
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Please tell me what you think
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raincheck applause. Sorry ran out of applause first time i read this.
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This is a very well written piece. It offers comfort and affirmation of the one whom you stand besides. Funny that so many say it sounds as if the have read this..it may be because you have drawn on something that so many see and feel on many levels...Well written with great imagery. You have painted a clear picture of unconditional love here. May your ink never run dry for yours is a tender voice to be heard.
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I just can't help feel like this is about someone I know!!!!!
hahaha....
it honstly swelled my eyes tonight
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well, it would more likely be about someone I know,
haven't you read this before??
YES, you have! What the hell, still..
I wrote this one time, we were talking, and you were so pissed.... -
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Well I don't remember being pissed then....but Im pissed now!!!
What about this other guy?
HAhahaha!
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fucking guy below me said the fucking same thing!!!!!!
HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Worthy of Praise
There is an interesting familiararity in this one, like I know excactly who your talking about. But of coures that's absurd. -
Very nice.. very sweet.
I can really relate to that boy.. Just this part:
I know his hurt
In this world of pain
Too many wrongs
That just stay the same
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All the sadness
In what we cannot change
Feeds his inner fire
Fuels his inner rage
It's a sad world in which we are all the victims, but it's people like you, Michelle, that help to pour a measure of peace into the souls of the weakest.
Good work!
♥
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That is so affectionate. I would give you applause but I ran out today.
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Wow!
Sweet, thoughtful, and sincere. Not only does this piece touch the heart and soul, it flows beautifully too. That's my humble opinion, anyway. I loved it!
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Very sweet Miss!
Still touching the hearts of others I see, from your sensual world. Me-oh-my he is a lucky guy!!!
Not sure why I came on here, just to see what you have been up to I guess
Take care and awesome work Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Beautiful!
I think that you did a wonderful job with this write. It's very sweet and heartfelt. Sometimes it's so difficult to find someone with these qualities. It's great to read that you have! Thanks for sharing this!
Jeremy0826
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this is pretty and heartfelt. It has a peace beneath the words and it is really comforting. you are an amazing poet. this was beautiful. love, Kiwi
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I like how you come up with such a variety of words. I don't think any of it sounds awkward. dammit why do your suggestions keep changing? lol.
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beautiful mastery!!!
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oops spelling error, that was supposed to be touched my heart not toughed my heart..HAHA
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This is amazing Michele! .. its been too long since I've been able to comment on your work, and it was a pleasure to come back to this piece. I have felt similar in the past, and reading this most definitely toughed my heart. Thank you for that
Keep up the excellent work!
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that is so pretty
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Wonderful. I liked this part...
"I know his hurt
In this world of pain
Too many wrongs
That just stay the same"
You always write right from the heart. I love it.
-----Kali
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It's a wonderful start, if not a wonderful finish.
I adored this. It wasn't too long, wasn't too short.
Love Love Love!!!
~Merber~
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i dont really have any emotions today.
but you and emily are right it goes with me and dami alot.
i think im going to read it again and see if any emotions come through.
great write as always mom
i dont know what else to say.
xox
april
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Wow April really needs to read thisi think, it fits her life well.perfectly lol. Wonderful write..I really like this and let me know when you add to it please...I would like to continue it !!!
Keep penning
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beautfiully penning
I could picture this and easily I can add my son to this write...for that boy is at the threshold of some very important decisions...I'm a lot older, so this would be a write (as if I wrote it) for a late teen/early adult young man...smiling here, and keep writing Michele...its been awhile since I last saw you...please smile...hugs and love, David
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