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Darfur, A Savage Hypocracy

During a panic attack, the eye of the storm,
A bullet drops, this world we'll reform.
Discharge metal death to anything you see move,
Your life now, it's time to remove.

In the name of Allah, in the name of Light,
We will begin this most Holy fight.
In the name of peace, in the name of love,
We will kill all who are not fit to live Above.

We will destroy their people, a blessed genocide.
We will burn their homes, a Holy War.
We will fight in the name of peace-
Bathing in the sins of saints,
And the light of sinners.

We fight now.

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Wake up, for their raid has begun,
Hide with me, or surley you'll come undone.
They come swift, deadly, and precise,
With a gun of destruction, and a heart of hate.
They live in vice, and by the dice,
Killing aimlessley without a care,
Murder and rape, no longer rare.

Hide with me, in the usual spot,
And pray to whatever's out there,
That we don't get caught.

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In a world of indifference,

And a world of hate,

Few understand the struggles to get by,

That most people face, day by day.

While we live in a country, that polieces the globe,

We look the other way of mass murder and rape.

Hunger, hate, and horrible hostility, welcome to a day in the life of a Darfur man.

While we complain of high gas prices and a person in office,

While we focus all of our attention on criticizing the moves and decisions of our President,

People die, of causes that could be stopped at any moment.

We stand up for hunger on the National Awarness Day,

We see the comercials on T.V,

Showing us the horrors that are truly, a reality.

But it's in one ear, out another,

For the citizens of the most powerful nation on the globe.

Who have the chance, no, the duty, to end the murder and hunger.

But no, we look the other way, as we continue on our ignorant lives.

 

 

 

Darfur isn't something we can ignore.

Doing nothing won't make it go away.

It's a genocide, is it here to stay?

Author notes

First section is about the people who are attacking the people in Darfur, second section is the viewpoint of a man who lives in Darfur, and the third section is my two cents about the whole situation.

I tried to use some sarcasm in this, and I also tried implimenting some degree of satire. Now, i want everyone to be brutally honest in critiquing this piece, because I'm planning on reading it for a poetry slam competition in February, and I want to be able to make changes and all that jazz. Wow, that was a huge run-on sentence.

Well, thanks for reading. And if you know what Darfur is and are concerned about it, join my group, "Darfur Awarness".

=)

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  • Field Marhal Benjy
    October 14, 2007

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    You captured the situation in this poem really well. Your opinion is right on the dot. While we compain about trivial things, people are dying. Well done on this poem.


  • darkknight marellus
    September 4, 2007

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    Ooooh.....Okay, one of my favorite poems I've read today. SPELLCHECK! There's a few typos, mostly spelling stuff, and that's okay. (You know, it'd be easier for others to read if you edit it and save the changes )

    So what do I love about this poem? Well, it's in three parts, and I noticed that before reading your comment. I love it. It's not so...one dimensional: it's not just "I see genocide. Genocide is bad." It's "Let's kill them" with a little "Let's not be murdered in our sleep" mixed in with "WTF AREN'T WE DOING ANYTHING?" I love it. I really hope you do well in that poetry slam. Keep me updated? I really like your style in this, and if this is your regular kind of writing, the sense of style and flow, well then you're set for getting far (or even making it big!) at that slam.

    So I want to tell you what came to mind at the end of this poem, and I saw a scene from the movie Hotel Rwanda. It's where Don Cheadle's character is talking to Joaquin Phoenix, who's just shot some film of the Rwandan genocide from outside the hotel. And note, this isn't a direct quote from the movie, so don't use this as a direct source! >.<

    Joaquin: I just shot some footage of what's going on outside.

    Don: Good! You can send it back to your country and when the people see it they'll be compelled to help us, right?

    J: Think of it this way: This footage will be shown on the news during prime time, during dinner. The people will see this footage, say "Ah, that's sad, someone's gotta do something about this." And then they'll just go back to their supper.

    I used this 'quote' (and I use this loosely, as it's DEFINITELY not an exact quote!) in an essay of mine about the correlation between what we've said after the Holocaust, what was said during/after the genocide in Rwanda, and what we've said but haven't done about Darfur. I had gotten a high mark and points on that specific quote, as it proved many points. Thank you for your poem; maybe more people will open their eyes to what's REALLY going on.

    Ellie


    • SoS
      September 5, 2007
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      Thanks. =]

      I'll definitely do a spell check.

      Anyways, as you said, the poem was made in three points so that I could try to get the point across that it's got to be us or no one to help. The crowd at the slam really liked it, and I wont first place in the category of "Originality". =]

      Thanks for the great comment, and the group membership! =]


  • January 1, 2007
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    All I can say...is wow.


    • SoS
      January 1, 2007
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      Haha thanks...I guess. Was that a good wow?

  • PalmettoSky
    December 30, 2006

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    I am amazed to read your work...Imagination is purely beautiful. Yeah and the rhyming pattern makes the poem just perfect..this is stunningly lovely.
    you are such a gifted poet..keep it up. I love and adore this poem, and I think many if not all the readers before agree that this is a very beautiful and well written and a well crafted poem. I like the rhyme and I love the alliteration. This is simply spectacular. I applaud you and I salute you for it. This poem has great imagery, so much description and details. Its incredibly good. you have terrific potential. peace to you always.


  • Providence
    December 29, 2006
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    Your 2 cents are worth a million. We haven't learn the lesson. not the lessons in Bosnia, Germany, or right in America against the Native People.

    Might never make right. It takes a conscience and wisdom to recognize pure evil when it ignored by the world.

    Bravo!
    Marianne

  • chrisky1
    December 28, 2006
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    six million Jews were killed in the Holocaust and we cried never again, now it's happening in Darfur and other places. How can we hold our heads up and be proud while we let this happen, A really meaningful write, Chris

    • SoS
      December 28, 2006
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      Yep. The United Nations declared never to stand idle while a genocide takes place. Now they're being hypocritical.

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