[Changing the Subject]
The gray muzzled mongrel
heaves his worn body down
onto the age warped boards.
Tongue hangs without effort
from a mouth that mourns each
dropped tooth and his eyes
ask questions that have never
had true answers. Lets out a sigh
as my daughter's baby thick arms
saran wrap his neck. She lays
her head next to him, wants
to know, in a child serious voice
if Toby will always be here-
I look towards the dog with the loss
of a parent who never truly knows
how to approach her offspring's
impending heartache and ask, too quick
if she wants to go play Candyland.
Author notes
--I think she knows, deep down
where the dark has begun to grow
that forever is merely a playword
& love costs too much to give
too freely. --
W.I.P.
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HEY!
grrrr the new system! I know that I already commented on this one, but it's okay cause now I got to read it again
I loved it just as mucgh the 2nd time around, maybe more....
You know, to me, it is such a credit to a poet when readers can take something with them when they go. One can always do that with your poems....A:WAYS....and yes, you write "Meli style"
Unique and amazing!!!
Lynda
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it's so dark and sad, but at the same time I can see a pin light of hope here. I can almost formulate a story of the poor creature in my mind. It's so real.
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haha, i agree with Trina- thank god for december and its goals, although you'll probably glare a hole through the computer at me if i say that, so pretend i just stopped by, applauded and left, okay?
-shirley-
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You are too kind, really. I appreciate the support, though. Trust me. I think I'm running on support alone...
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lol, most likely, your welcome
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You have captured a moment...a moment that every parent watches their child work through. And you've done so with great imagery, and emotion. Awesome write!
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I like the storytelling and imagrey - child-fat arms, saran wrapping hug, floor boards, dropped teeth, etc. Very effective. I think the word quick should be quickly. It's funny that in parenthesis above your poem it says "changing the subject".
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LOL Changing the Subject is actually the title of the piece.
I hardly use the AP title as my titles... but use them more to catagorize the poem.
I'll look into the quick/quickly issue. Thank you for the suggestion.
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I love it when I click recent posts by favorites and see that you have again penned a piece. I love this December goal of yours; as it more for me to devour. Such an amazing sense of realism, helplessness and truth in this one...as always...Trina
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