wednsday, december 27
10:25 p.m.
apathetic
in the headlights
Pupils were dialated
her guts
Her BODY
buzzed angrily
the frusteration of someone
so fucked up
that
she can't feel her own nails
digging into Her Own Skin.
am i wrong?
burning lips, face against glass
the phone rings;
but does she really
hear It?
CAN she?
her eardrums are wounded
repeatedly with words
of mindless juvie Freaks
how long until they pop?
bloodied,
dirty
Birds' Wings stashed
in 3 corners of your bedroom.
another Saliva-soaked night
the junction
of your hands
and Her Hips
pulling her
back against you.
bone on bone.
am i wrong?
you begged, "you can trust me."
i believe.
you breathed,
like a beautiful taxi driver
with broken lungs,
said "yeah?"
asked, "do you like the way
i treat you, like a s---"
and she NODDED
she fucking adored it.
he knows it, she knows it.
there's something more there,
more to that.
more meaning to those feelings.
am i wrong?
all the time
lost in Asphyxia.
am i wrong?
whispers can only
fix so much.
eyes glazed over
with harsh sunlight
her World is
death and beating Hearts
around every corner
her life is Cold breathing, love,
Thought, and smelling of Sex, Hospital,
and Lysol.
AM I WRONG?
its really kind of epic,
isn't it?
not really movie material; maybe a novella.
hey, i don't eat because
my Empty Insides
talking to me
let me know that i'm alive.
its sad that that's what it
sometimes takes, isn't it?
because,
and i'm real glad you don't
know what this feels like,
but sometimes
i don't feel a Pulse
red Xs on my December
don't mean much now
but you're a subtle reminder
of the lack of Sleep
and bloodshot eyes.
you're bitter, sometimes i gag.
i guess this is the Long Haul.
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i like some of the concepts in here, but the rhetorical questions and the random all caps look weird.
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i agree that the title is dirty pretty but i think its just simply clever
even though i dont like long poems [and that always happens with me long poems bc i have a short attention span] but i find my eyes never leave the lines you write. which is WOW amazing lol
you should def look into making your own book girley.. i'd pay for it. shipping and handling too!! <3
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really explosive...
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Neat Poem
I admire this piece for its details and edgy nature. It is embedded with frustration and sexual undertones. It has a disjointed sadness to it that is intruiging, and every time I read it I notice something different.
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thanks so much, i am really glad that you liked it. i try to give every piece as many hidden meanings as i can so it never gets boring.
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Doll, This was Breath Taking.
"she fucking adored it.
there's something more there,
more to that.
more meaning to those feelings"
First off. The Title. Was Dirty Pretty wonderful.
Secondly. This entire piece was amazing.
I loved it.
♥
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wow that took my breath away.
i love the repeated phrase of 'am i wrong'
i can relate to the beginning bit.
i loved the turn it took though and the bitterness in it. you really make me want to be in the scene you've created.
i like the ending
'but you're a subtle reminder
of the lack of Sleep
and bloodshot eyes.'
it's really gracious in a fucked up sort of way. i love it.
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