Beautiful cannot illustrate you dear,
Every endeavor I make
Always proves to be an
Understatement, I can try over a
Thousand times but the
Images on paper cannot convey your
Fairness, your elegance and
Until I can paint you perfectly
Lost for words am I, my dear.
Author notes
An acrostic
A contest entry
- I Need Some Pick Me Ups by di ivers.
600 points, ended December 20, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a very nice rhythmic piece of poetry with a pleasant beat and words of inspiration speaking in thunderous whispers. Good imagery and flow are both well presented within these bouncy lines. -
First I would like to say thank you for entering my contest and good luck...this poem is truly amazing and such a wonderful piece of art...again thank you and good luck.
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Nicely done... I enjoy reading an acrostic that actually makes sense instead of just random words slapped on a page. Thank you for your entry.
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This is very beautiful and heartfelt.
Acrostics are one of my favorite types
of poems to write. You did a great job
with this one my friend! Thanks for sharing
it and keep it up!
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Fitting poem. She must be wonderful, glad you found some happiness Jarrod. Keep smiling and writing. ~Sie
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Oh an acrostic! Ha, I forgot I gave an acrostic as a choice
Thank you for pleasantly surprising me. This poem truly made me smile. I loved how your words and lines blended into each other. It was so loving and honest. Your word choices were beyond perfect! Your girlfriend is lucky to have you. Thank you for giving me a poem that lifted me up. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Nicely shared!
What a nice dedicatory poem for your girlfriend! I admire the qualities that you mention, fairness & elegance, as it's not often that those are recognized. I bet that she loved your art work! Very nice. joy
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this poem was beautiful, every girl needs someone like you in their lives to lighten it up with things like this =) this was really sweet
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i swoon for your pen
how you manage to make the flow so very chivalrous without any condescension is the magic here. very elegant, very respectful and truly romantic.
the kind of poem a little girl dreams about having someone write for her. your muse is blessed indeed.
~pf
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Wonderful acrostic! I think this is one of the better ones I've seen here on allpoetry so far! Great tribute to your girlfriend... I love the fact that it flowed without sounding stunted at each letter. Truly masterfully done.
Love and luck in all you endeavor!
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awwwwww this poem is soooooo sweet... I am sure your girlfriend loved it... you write soooo beautifully!!!! I enjoy reading your poems!!!!
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This is a lovely poem that you have written here, filled with so much emotion, I can feel the love as I am reading this poetry well done dear poet
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Beautiful in it's simplicity. Acrostics are rarely ever written correctly, but I like what you have done here. She must have swooned.
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A wonderful and joyess read. Sweet and romantic. Your girlfriend is surely lucky to have you. You did a great job with this one and I'm not the only one to believe that. Keep on writing and have a great New Year!
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i didn't even notice this was an acrostic. wow
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This has a gentle touch of old Victorian...
a beautiful little poem for the love who
holds your heart. I truly loved reading...
Love, Lane -
awww
this is really beautiful. the fact that it is short really makes a statement. I hope she is touched by this peice
Falon
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Aw, this is so heartfelt. I don't see guys write like this, usually. Your girlfriend must be very lucky to have a guy in her life who can write poetry as beautiful a this. Great write.
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Heartfelt
I think this says alot about you. I think back to the first poems of yours I read on here and you have come along way Jarrod...both in writing and emotional healing. Very good emotion in this poem, she is a lucky girl, as well as you for finding her.
~Becky
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awwwwwwww!!!!! I don't see very many poems like this. And to think... just for your girlfriend! Yep.. she's a lucky one.
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B-E-A-utiful.
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Aww, this is a really touching poem, and I'm so familiar with your words here. I can never capture a love the way that I want to in words neither...some things just go beyond them. You did a nice job at expressing here within just a few lines. Your ending was perfect for this, too! It was my favorite part. Nice job.
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Stunning!
This poem says how much you really feel for the person. Any girl from my of veiw would fall for you in a second if you read that to them. It shows the true meaning of lvove for another person. The fact that a man of your state could write such a beautiful poem. DOnt take it into ofeence, but mostly, men who are gay or are just loners write such beautiful poetry. I commend you on your "breaking of the box" how you say.
Hola -
Full of sentiment. i hope it is a two way feeling. Short and sweet but precise. Another good piece.
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Beautiful
A poem of love so beautifully written.I hope she appreciates every word.Such love is very precious.I wish you both joy, Ros -
Awww this has got to be one of the sweetest things I have ever read... Men do not write like this very often so it is breathtaking to say the least. The first poem I have had the pleasure of reading from yuo and I am already won over. If you get to know me you will find that I am a love sick, over emotional young woman... though I am rational, open minded, and a very logical person.
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Oh!
Aw that is so sweet! I love the way you write!
Adding your comment:
just kidding!! awesome job 
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