You are a silent monster
you are eating me inside
A grey and fibrous monster
There is nowhere I can hide
I’ll take the rancid poison
do what I have to do
I’ll do it for my family
the radiation too
I’m sick all night
awake all day
Silent monster leave me
that is what I pray
So now you took my hair
you also took my pride
I fight you with vengeance
my family by my side
You think that you can kill me
you won’t without a fight
I have the finest doctors
they attack you day and night
You forget, I’m not alone
there are those that love me
Silent monster I will beat you
Not stopping till you flee
by: Amera Eileithyia
In a list
A contest entry
- Breast Cancer Awareness (contest) by astralshepherd.
800 points, ended October 23, 2007, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 71st Contest by Tarja.
800 points, ended November 15, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thank you, I just won my own fight!
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Yay!
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Congrats on the honorable mention trophy. This was such an inspiring piece and it really does belong in this contest. Thank you so much for the lovely metaphor.
It's something that many women can relate to and I admire your sharing your thoughts.
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quite incredibly conveyed indeed... such strength and vulnerability expressed all at once!
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Life is so tenuous. When we add something like breast cancer to it, there is a pulling, a stretching of emotions that is almost unbearable, at times it goes beyond unbearable. The thoughts go off into a realm of their own, some fear, some anxiety, some denial but the mind cannot keep the overload and onslaught on the body. The is where those who have compassion and love enter. It may be a kind smile or meals made or just sitting and listening, the key is to know the isolation from life is an illusion…to offer love at every turn. Its not only the devastation of cancer that eats away at life, it is also the feeling of being so very alone. Your words, “I’m not alone” are very powerful and your poem offers both reality and hope. Again, thank you so much for entering the contest , I truly do appreciate your efforts.
Blessings and best wishes,
~r.
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I am so pleased to see an entry from you in this contest. And a wonderful quatrain to boot. You always do form brilliantly. A superb message. ~Pamela
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Amera, thank you so much for entering your poem, “Silent Monster” into my contest, it is truly an honor to have this poem posted here. Your unique perspective is a welcome addition. This is a boilerplate note that I place on all poems entered to let you know I have reviewed your poem and have made my initial observations. Please feel free to add to or modify your poem as I will make my final assessments after the close of contest. I will judge the contest approximately ten days after that and will make any additional comments at that time. Thank you, again, I truly do appreciate your effort and wish you best of luck in the contest.
Blessings and best wishes,
~r.
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This is powerful. VERY powerful, it brought a tear to my eyes..you touched on how families feel..fighting something you cannot see. Cancer attacks where everyone is vulnerable.. their emotions, their family weakness, their stamina for tragedy. This is beautiful. I love this part.
You think that you can kill me
you won’t without a fight
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Reading the comments below I can see who this was written for. Breast cancer runs rampant through my family, it's a horrid thing to see someone go through, but when they have the love and support of a strong family they will come out on the otherside to walk in the sunshine once again
Cathy
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You Said it Amera!
Hon,you said it!We cheer you for writing it! We won't give in,and You are a darling friend of our dear friend..She is a fighter! We cheer her on.!"You forget I am not alone "there are those that love me" and we do...and we fight and we pray with her Bravo Amera!.
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plus...you can't really tell why it happened...how...and what...it just catches you by surprise...
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GREAAAAAAAAAAAT job..and it is true...cancer is just a treacherous disease...and in this case...a monster...haha..GREAT JOB@!!!!!!!!!!!
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Thanks. I will forward it. it is just what the Doctor ordered! Ha ha ha.
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i lost a parent to cancer, it is a treacherous battle to wade. nice rhyme, and thought provoking flow. thank you for entering my contest!
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This is a very brilliant poem and my congratulations on it. If it is true then you are very brave and my best wishes. I shall put you on my favourites.
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thank you
Thank you Steven. Yes it is true but I’m not the brave one. It was my mother; it’s been two years now and she’s been free of breast cancer. Your words are very kind. Amera
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