Broken porcelain
splinters fall to the floor
shards pierce naked flesh
opening wounds of pain
exposing all inside
the bitterness, the rage
pours out of me now
The stiches come apart
the ones, that hold the
sleeve that I wore my
heart on. It's undone
everything has come undone
Falling apart at the seems
Can't hold it together
The display case, that held
me in, now covered in dust
Noone cares, to see what's
inside, the brutal truth
I shined, at one time
Someone cared for me, once
Yesterday's value, today's trash
And now a bitter truth pierces
my heart, with the knowing
that this is the final breaking
point, and time to take one
last breath, as reality grows
dark and silent. Noone to hear
me scream or catch my falling tears
A contest entry
- Contest for fun where onlyWelcome 2 members are welcome! by Crimson Lotus.
525 points, ended January 5, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Blasphemous Rumours by Exodus.
500 points, ended February 5, 2007, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I did enjoy this piece quite a lot. Where others have not, you have put thought into the poem, presented it well and all over, made it a GOOD poem.
You had some wonderfully put together lines and your entire poem flowed beautifully. The only thing I have to comment on is that perhaps you should revise some of your punctuation, make sure you've used the right thing in the right spot.
Thankyou for a lovely read.
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Sad
I hope this isn't true for you.....that would suck dude.....great write!
KAY
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Deep Cubby ~
Out of applauses, so just know that I would have given you 3 if I had the pts to spare ~
I loved this poem Cubby....made me think ~
Papa Bear ~
....oh I guess I can spare a few pts. for my Cub ~
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