Recently…
I had to begin,
to build a wall…
To protect something…
It will be a long process,
possibly taking months,
to complete…
A long, slow, process…
At first,
I build slowly,
and someone could
merely step over
the courses of bricks…
I am using a special mortar,
one where I decide,
if and when,
it dries…
Many holes will be left,
running throughout the wall,
for rebar, to strengthen it
when I feel the need…
Then more mortar
poured around the rebar,
when I feel the need,
to do so…
And allowed in time to harden…
Then sheets of steel,
to encase this wall,
inside and out…
When the first phase is complete,
if it ever is,
just brick and mortar…
I will place a stone,
a very special stone,
outside just at the base
of the wall…
That stone will be known as
WANT…
It is quite large,
yet easily handled…
One well placed hit
from this stone,
to a well hidden weak spot,
deliberately left,
will destroy the wall
at most any time…
For my wall
is designed that way…
For you see,
I have to protect something…
Something very precious to me…
Something I had given away freely,
and have been forced to take back…
This time,
my wall will protect it…
Yet I know
I can show someone
the weak spot,
if I wish…
And someone that I have
to protect it from,
will have to
WANT
to destroy it...
For the wall,
my dear friends
will protect,
something very special
to me…
It will protect
my HEART…
© Jonathan Wikkins May 25, 2003
Revised February 11, 2008
All Rights Reserved
Author notes
Written May 26th, 2003
Revised February 11, 2008
AP name Jonathan Wikkins, pen name
this piece had been written to help me get over a breakup with a fiance. since then, she did pick up the stone called WANT, and made good use of it!
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A contest entry
- Letting go/ saying good bye... by Bel-airHead57.
250 points, ended May 29, 2003, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Broken promisses... by Wolf Mistress.
1200 points, ended February 23, 2008, 39 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for following the explanation rule
I already thought it had to be something like that...
Love doesn't always goes as we have planned
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Wow...I must say I loved the way you used the metaphore of building this wall a lot...The only thing missing is an explanation of what happened, although it had to be a broken heart...but maybe for the good order you can explain just a little in your autornotes...like one of my only 3 rules states
I will wait for that...
But liked it a lot, and your background is wonderful too...I loved the colors a lot
Thnxs for entering
XXJeannette
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I loved this and I very much appreciate you commenting on my poem 'A Part Of Me'. You wrote about building a wall and leaving that weak spot and I wrote about someone breaking through my wall. I guess everyone can relate to this. We all try and protect ourselves form the hurt. Wish we didn't have to because there is so much no one sees because we cower behind our makeshift walls. SO scared to come out into the world. So scared to be hurt again. An amzing write. Kepp writing good poet.
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Please read the rules....
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A wall protecting the heart and yet made to crumble for the right woman. Sigh...quite an amazing write my friend. Not so sure my wall is built to self destruct..
Hugs..
Mary Ann -
An excellent write..One so many of us can relate too..And feel! That rock will be thrown someday, sometime..And you will be lucky if you see it coming! Because more often than not, it blind sides you!
D. -
when the walls come tumbling down the trumpets will sound ... and you will be free to move away from the prison which you have created ... then another journey will begin - having been a prisoner myself I wish you the best - excellent self expression on protecting that which has been hurt - life has a funny way of sending storms to tear our walls down, the real question is whether or not we are willing to move on and build a different type of structure - peace ~ B
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Ahh...protecting of our heart, the most hurt organ in our body. This was very beautiful. and I am curious does it work? Building that wall? This was very sad, yet moving.And I enjoyed it.
Carrie -
Beautifully expressed and vividly descriptive. A wonderful job on this piece. Sad and very moving! Like odeon said, "freakin' awesome" LOL
~Kathy -
I agree with Rose on this. This was one of my ALL TIME FAVES!!!! really can relate and really really loved this one hun. I am just stunned. freakin awesome
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this one honey has got to go into your best poem list I think that this grand indeed thank you for shareing it
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It gives me the image of rebuilding a life, hope, love.
The time to heal is important. I agree it's amazing.
Bittersweet in nature. Time is the healer.
Blessed Be. -
i like it!
Very nice. Thoughtful and well written poem. Like the 'solid' imagery in here - with the deliberate weak spot. Beautiful sentiment. Good luck with the contest. Great write!
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You built that wall so very well..i thought this was amazeing and so heartfelt, you did a wonderful job with this one, and good luck in the contest...
Kimberly -
great job.
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Excellent
I beileve that so many people have fashioned a wall or barrier to
hide away from what lies before them.Fear of life and the paranoia
of what is to be, is why we create a prison that no one may see.
Traped whithin ourselfs for to long that we are unable to see that life is passing all around...
Well I seem to be rambling on,sorry but this one really made me think.Well done! Wondeful job you'v done yet again!
Blessings to you dear Mike!
~Spirit~ -
I'ts not often I'm left speechless Mike but my dear friend this is one of those ocassions, where no words I can offer will do justice to this masterpiece.
Love to you Mike
~Von~ -
For the wall, will encase, my heart.........The feelings within your poems is heart wrenching........The picture of the love you held for this person you write about is so beautiful......they all are.........such a tragedy but you pour all the love have for person in masterpieces........thanks so much..........lisa anne
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