i used to think we had this connection
unbreakable by the bonds of life.
thought i'd found someone
who i understood & understood me.
i used to think we were insoluble
indissolvable,
like an iceberg
floating through life's bitter cold together
finding warmth where warmth could be found
[i know it's contradictory.]
i didn't think we'd ever fall apart like this
communication seems to be the bare minimum
these days..
since when am i the last one to know
everything about you
i used to be the first..
i miss having you as a friend
not that your not around but..
it's different
life's thrown us a few curve balls
wouldn't you say?
distraction is vital
in forgetting who you once were
giving in to what you can't change
giving up..
because, honey, you never had a shot in hell
to begin with..
[are we hiding, darling?
i want to hide to]
i've never had as much fun doing nothing
as i have with you
pondering over senseless thoughts
useless things,
& our very own >>.h.o.p.e.l.e.s.s. d.r.e.a.m.s.<<
you & me..
someone i could talk to
when i was miserable & pacing..
stumbling over the words
i wouldn't tell anyone else
or just content with what the world had dealt me
thinking happy thoughts as i learned to accept
what i can't possibly change
when i needed you, you were always there
thank you for your kindness >>o.n.c.e. u.p.o.n. a. t.i.m.e.<<
no one ever really cared that much
[i'm missing something here
oh wait, it's you...]
as i stressed
you calmed my fears
& when you stressed
i tried to do the same
but i'm feeling pretty low right now
it's been awhile..
n' no one's around to dissuade these irrationalities
things have changed but..
i never thought we would
Author notes
*lysdarling*
--option 4 and option 5--
A contest entry
- [Pain] by whiterabbit..
360 points, ended October 14, 2007, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Oh Sweetie; You're so [D-I-R-T-Y] pretty. by Candy Morphine.
550 points, ended January 23, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - my dear friend... by ilovE him.
400 points, ended May 16, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
comments always welcome
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this is so beautiful. everything about it draws me closer and closer to the poems. it's brilliant in such an understated sense.
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wow, this is just wonderful and so sad. I really love it and I know what you mean. I love the way this was written. Amazing job and thanks so much for entering.
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Um I want to give everyone a fair chance, and I think you're in the finals once or twice. So this one is just going to get honorable mentions. OK? I hope you don't take it offensively.
"i miss having you as a friend
not that your not around but..
it's different"
This hit me. Some of my friends changed. I know that might not quite be what you are referring to, but those people are still around, but they just aren't my friends anymore. Great write! -
this spoke volumes to me.
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what i first caught off as really unique was the comparision of your realationship with a ice berg. ...i am sorry your friend hurt you like that. I had a friend...i havent heard from her in about a year...it hurt how it ended...this was a very powerful entry. good luck in the contest.
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I don't even know what to say to this and I am surprised that you posted it shortly after we talked on the phone for over a couple hours.
"because, honey, you never had a shot in hell
to begin with.."??? I don't understand this.
It took me a long time to figure out what to say to this and I still don't know.
I hope you don't blame it all on me. It's neither of our faults, it's just what has happened.
Every time I tried to tell you I froze. The closer someone was to me the harder it was to find the words and just say it. I should have told you sooner but it was so hard to.
I miss you and hope you know that I'm always here for you. If your pissed at me that's fine. I still don't know what to say.
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i started writing this, bits & pieces at a time, not really knowing what i was trying to say..in the beginning, i was thinking of you but only for a few stanzas[the last 3 or 4 mainly]...the rest i kept revising & revising until the poem ended up meaning something else, not something i am necessarily feeling but yes, you're right about it being partly about me n' you, not nearly as drastic though..those lines mean nothing b/c they didn't refer to you, i was thinking along the lines of two people not having a chance to get ahead, a way of saying it was understood n' that it wasn't really anyone's fault how they ended up but that's in no way a comparison to you & i, my dear..i felt fine after we talked the other day, i miss you! i hope this ice melts soon! p.s. i was never mad at you, i understand how hard it must've been just finding out..i'd never hold it against you..
i love you chicka,
-lys
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Change is something that just happens throughout life and unfortunately, it happenes with people that you adore the most.
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Lys, im so sorry, i dont even know what to say...except for...im sorry...this wanted to make me cry all the way through it, and actually i had tears well up, but i never let them drop...
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i love this. it's so hard to lose a friend, especially when you have no idea that happened or why the relationship ended...i feel it. great write. thanks for your comment =)
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