The blank page mocks me in silent glee
As I stare at an empty screen
Feelings seethe inside my head
For their words cannot be seen
Anger builds as thoughts collide
Finding no form of release
The memories are a bitter pill
That give no sign of ease
Then finally the words appear
A flurry of unpent rage
The feelings surge, the thoughts expand
Exploding on the page
As the final words come flowing out
The written page complete
The hurt inside begins to fade
For it's finally been released
~ greg ~
Author notes
Some random thoughts I had while trying to write another poem, ..that then became this poem.
*This is a reedit of something from last year. The words ring true once again.*
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything Interesting. by tender-butterfly.
415 points, ended January 3, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter Your Best Prewrite by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended February 25, 2007, 105 entries
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Comments
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Good write. Yes those pent up frustrations put on the page is a great form of release to make us feel better. Thanks for sharing and keep writing .
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Thanks ck,
Yes, frustrations often lead to unexpected releases.
It helped wake me up and I'll have something new up in a bit.
Greg
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Been there, done that
I sometimes feel my muse resides
in my fngertips not inside
my brain nor my soul nor my heart,
as if all along we`re apart.
Just new born sans the memories
searching for the lost expertise
to create just one simple line
that doesn`t end with an orange.
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Been there, done that
I sometimes feel my muse resides
in my fngertips not inside
my brain nor my soul nor my heart,
as if all along we`re apart.
Just new born sans the memories
searching for the lost expertise
to create just one simple line
that doesn`t end with an orange.
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Thanks Bob,
Yes, your description pretty much nails it.
We all go through it at one time or another. Yet we feel lost and alone when it happens to us while reading beautiful work from the others.
Sometimes just finding that one good line or two can bring the flow back. It's just a matter of patience, which I sometimes lack. -chuckles-
Greg
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Very interesting! I know at some point most every poet has felt this way one time or other, or has either written about poetry as being a 'release' or method of 'relief'. I like how you used very concise imagry to get your subject across, the theme was very apparent and not hindered by excessive ranting or misdirecting tangents. I'm sure many will be able to relate to this piece. Very effective poem. keep up the excellent writing!
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Thanks Mallius,
Yes, I'm sure all writers go through these feelings at one point or another. It felt good to put words to the feelings.
I've been spending more time writing stories in SW lately, but I miss the short form and expression of poems. Thanks for the reminder to remember my roots.
Greg
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Good to see you writing poetry again! It's been way too long.
Reading poems of consistant meter and smooth rhyming are most enjoyable for me . . . thank you. I wonder sometimes if "writer's block" is simply our inability to acknowledge some struggle or other happening within ourselves. Indeed, as you've stated, the admitting often breaches the dam. I really liked this piece!
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Thank you Carrie,
Yes, it's been a while. I hope to come here more now. I've been spending much time in SW but I miss the short form of poems to express the inner thoughts of my feelings.
They can not be expressed accurately in stories. I have commitments to a couple of groups there now but will start spending more time here again to release my inner thoughts that seem to be trapped.
After all, this is where I started.
Thanks for the comment and encouragement.
And Happy New Year!
ttyl
Greg
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It really is an impresive piece, "The blank page mocks in silent glee." great beginning, and flows well, Good work.
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Interesting a poem about how to be inspired to write a poem... Very creative though. I know the feeling of wanting to release all the past and all your feelings but you just can't find the right words to pen down, then they all of a sudden surge out and they are perfect, just takes a while sometimes.
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Ayep, Evil writers Block, Hate it, But loved this piece, it show all the struggles that we some times go through to write words, poetry music, etc. I know too well the feelings of sitting before this screen and having nothing come to light, very frustrating. well done here though well done
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Considering you've only been writing for a few months, this is quite impressive--You've clearly got some talent.
Some technical suggestions: 1. Try to find a synonym for the word "release" to use either in line 6, or line 16 (as would probably be easier given the rhyme scheme.)
2. I'd omit the word "for" in both lines 4 and 16, as in my opinion in disrupts the flow.
3. The better part of stanza 2 seems awkward. Try a few things, like changing "a bitter pill" to "bitter pills" or "finding" to "to find."
4. You may consider revising lines 8 and 16, their alright the way they are, but I think they could be improved.
Overall, as I said before, this is impressive.
Nice work, keep writing,
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Loved this piece. it describes well the escape from a lengthy writers block. Amazing portrayal.
~Breathless
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"the memories are a bitter pill that gives no sign of ease" i love this part because thats how memories can sometimes be great write
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Great
Well, I myself think that when we write what we feel inside it helps to decrease the hurt, or anger.
This poem is filled of truth I must say.
Thank you for this entry into my very first contest and all the best to you.
tender
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Wow!
This is pretty amazing! I really liked this. it is a nice way of expressing what you went thru to try to write the poem. keep up the work. i'd like to read more of your stuff. -
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Thanks!
It actually came about from thoughts I had while trying to write something else, and then thought to write about the process itself.
~ greg ~
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