My eyes are getting heavy
And my mind's not working right
I try to fight off that lonely slumber
Can't handle having a nightmare tonight
I fight it off as long as possible
How I dread those hateful dreams
But I can't help if I'm exhausted
And the world can't stop my screams
I think of you one last time
Before that dreamland finally appears
And my dreams are haunted with your image
And filled with my empty fears
I can see you standing, laughing
As my broken heart falls out of my chest
It lands there bloody on the floor
As I get much needed rest
My body rejuvinates itself
As I'm forced to explore my morbid mind
I awake this time before a loved one's hurt
And leave those dreadful dreams behind
I awake to find you no where
And a part of me feels relieved
It's so hard to tell what's real sometimes
It's just too easy to believe
I fear so badly my dream world
So I live life fighting sleep
The bags under my eyes can tell the story
Even If I never make a peep
So I push away the evil things
That always make me want to scream
And I tell them they can't hurt me now
But I'll see them in my dreams
Author notes
I hate sleep, I have had night terrors as long as I can remember, and would rather go without sleep than not be able to wake up. The images are dreadful
A contest entry
- DRIFTING OFF INTO DREAMLAND by R S Adams Jr.
550 points, ended January 19, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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In your dreams
‘See You In My Dreams’ – comment by the judge
‘rejuvinates’ = ‘rejuvenates.’
I can feel the cry for release and the dreaded fear of sleep. You have expressed the feeling vividly.
I particularly enjoy your description of the fight and not wanting to go into dreamland. There is a chill, a scary feeling.
You have faced the challenge of rhyme and succeeded well.
Well done. * rose* Richard
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thank you
Thank you for entering the competition which is judged by me, with no knowledge of who the poet is. I am impressed by the quality of many of the entries. I will spend a few days studying each poem and look for the trophy winners.
I will give points to the poets who have written to the criteria mentioned in the requirements, - your feelings and thoughts in that moment between the real world and dream world. I am hopeful that the expression of such emotions is vividly portrayed in any poetic form.
Peace to You
Richard
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shit really?!
thats messed up man. Go and see a psychiatrist. In fact you me and all the screaming voices inside my head could get a group therapy thing goin on haha
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this was kick ass..... totaly dar poem i liked it..
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Awww sweety
I am with you here. I hate sleep for almost the same reason. The best of luck to you in the contest!
Kari
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