Hi My Name Is Little Timmy,
Here I lay on the cold wet ground.
Barely six months old.
Feeling all funny, and dead inside.
Why am I growing cold?
I don't understand, Why mommy is sad.
I don't think I was bad.
She is holding me,
Crying in pain.
Her tears they fall like rain.
What is this flowing from me,
All red and sticky?
I don't understand we went for a walk.
She stopped: I dropped my binky.
I heard this sound,
I looked around,
With Curiosity.
I saw the tires,
I heard the BOOM.
Now I am Tumbling.
Mom is still Crying,
I don't understand.
Why I feel this way.
Some man ran over me, I think he has my name.
I don't understand.
Mom, Tried her best to save me.
She is clutching me to her chest.
Breathing in me breathe,
While Big Tim is standing there,
With an expressionless face.
As the cops,
Make him walk a line.
He can't stand up,
He is what? Drunk.
Seeming Not To Care.
He took my life,
For a sip of hard liquor.
He stopped my heart to soon.
I hope someday he understands,
Why driving Drunk Isn't cool.
Author notes
This isn't my best. It is hard to write on a subject this devestating when I have kids of my own, and the thought of losing them Tears me up.
Written May 25th, 2003
A contest entry
- For Little Timmy by Timothy Cameron.
393 points, ended May 31, 2003, 7 entries
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goodd poem.
~Kicks~ -
i think you really did a great job on this poem exspecailly with what the contest was about anyways. I choose not to enter this one because it is so sad and i have had enough going on about death anyways. I lost my sister on Mother's Day and I am going through alot so keep writing
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i like it!
Beautifully written, Carrie. Difficult - real difficult - subject handled quite well. If I read this again, I'll probably start tearing up (damn onions!) -
"I don't understand, Why mommy is sad.
I don't think I was bad.
She is holding me,
Crying in pain.
Her tears they fall like rain"
- is heart-wrenching. Great write!
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This is so unique. So critical. Oh, gosh. I found the way you wrote this attributive to the criteria. Good for you!
In content, I found this to be excessively disturbing. But perhaps 'Tim' can receive some further healing as well. As for the child.....it's horrible to the parents. But. He isn't the one who was responsible and is in his glory. The one left here is the one who has the toil for the remainder of years. gasps. I'm overwhelmed I think.
Thank you for writing this. -
Hi Carrie. It brought back memories, to be sure. I have said it before (not to you) I have been speaking for MADD for twelve years. It is VERY hard sometimes. There were times when the pain was so bad I wanted to run my car into a highway overpass support pillar. It's been years since I felt that bad, but I have been there. Many people in MADD can’t speak about it, so they help in other ways. You wrote about it. You stepped up to the plate and did what a hero would do. You reached inside and gave of your soul. Thank you. Yes, the criteria was not met, but what price can be put on gifts from the heart. Let's stop someone from becoming another drunk driver and creating another victim of this horrible tragedy through our medium as poets...poetry. Thank you for your contribution.
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Wow! You really captured what little Timmy must of been thinking,
I mean like total confusion, and the pain of it all as well...
I have to say, this makes me upset, for obvious reasons...
Well penned Carrie, this is a tough subject to write about...
-Timothy -
This is fantastic.. you're gonna get me crying if I read it one more time.. whoa, amazing write, good luck in the contest, and keep writing!
~becca aKa bewareofcarrots -
Incredible. Absolutely heart-wrenching. Add in Big Tim and Little Timmy, ( i think it's criteria) and you'll definetely win. Good luck.
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Wow absolutely beautiful, clear and concise with a wonderful flow I knew someone could do a much better job than me. great write
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the death of a Child or any love one no matter what seems to affect us all tremendously I suppose, the whole thing being the loss of love I suppose, can't really say it ever affected the dead people so much, because I kinda think myself they in such a better place than this world so full of spite hate anger and so forth, but this is a tragic story, the Mom, you know suffers immensely, I just hope and Pray she is strong enough to not be consumed with vengeance or hatred or what have you, that is the saddest loss of life of all in my opinion to see a person unable to truely excercise the freeing of forgiveness, once you harbor sadness/anger it seems, life is over for the survivors too it seems, it changes them in a not so good way quite often, consumed with changing the world, when we all have a world immediately around us that most all of us need to change, if we could all change the world in our immediate midst, would not this world be a better place I could only imagine, share in love kindness generosity and forgiveness to the highest degree to every person you came in contact with??? yeah I dunno guess me is a utopian dreamer a it LOL, but it does seem worth the effort I guesses, anywhos a very touching write, especially being based in a real life event, I send prayers and blessings to the mother to be able to love those that still remain inthis world with the same love she had for her sweet little child:)
Kindest regards and much warm love and smiles your way
LOL
most sincerely,
joe -
wow... i don't know about it not being your best or not, but...
i chose not to write for this one...
not that i've been involved in any way with something like this, but... i just couldn't bring myself to write about a subject such as this...
i can only imagine the pain the parents of little timmy went through by loosing him...
but, still this is a wonderful write, as seen through his eyes...
love and light
mike
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