why are the flowers still blooming
why do the birds still have song
why are there people still smiling
when for me, everything is wrong
why are the stars still twinkling
why does the sun still shine
why is the world still turning
when you, are no longer mine
A contest entry
- *rose*xX*Broken-hearted Darkness*Xx*rose* by dying-gothic-roses.
300 points, ended December 26, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I liked this piece because I can relate to it personally on a different level. It always seems like people laug loudest and have the most fun when you're completely miserable. Nice way to portray that message.
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i dont know who skeeter davis is, this is a tribute to one of my fave poems. stop all the clocks, by w.h. auden
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I see you like Skeeter Davis. I suppose this is supposed to be a tribute poem.......... I shall have to keep an eye on you, dear.
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simple and a easy read...in short i like it.
jason skams
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Wow, this was sad. Reminded me of one of my poems, in a way. You have talent, that's for sure. Keep of writing.
Darcia -
Wow
I can relate to this. I really can, this is a good write. Short, sweet, and too the point.
Joci
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this is pretty good i thought some lines could have been revised but it as still not enough to ddrag down the poem good job
xX*Cheyenne*Xx*
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Amazing. I really liked this poem and I like the flow of how it went eventhough it was short. It was good. Great job. Keep up the good work.
Nikki -
Too many rhetorical questions. Answers should have been given. There was a lack of description and lack of feeling when all you asked was why. Inner tormet I could tell, but a little insight would help the reader out.
Chaos -
the rhythm/rhyme was on the dot and i liked the general idea of the poem. how can people function when someone's life is crumbling? It's a puzzling concept most of us will never be able to grasp. thanks for the comment and hope you had a great christmas
Madison -
sorry i dont have time to read it but i didnt forget u i will read it promise
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