The path divides before us.
Which one shall we choose?
If we always stay together,
I know we can not loose.
If you choose the left one
and I decide the right.
Our journey will be done
my hand can’t hold you tight.
For now our love goes nowhere
as we’re standing in the road.
Forlorn in great despair,
to you I’m still bestowed.
I take your path let’s stay together,
I’ll follow where you go.
Now holding hands forever.
There’s a path we’ll never know.
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this is a really good write, the only thing I can see in your free writes you still have your old style tied with in them , which is not a bad thing Amera, as sometimes I tie in a bit of rhyme to make mine flow, or I tie in lots of imagery, in this one just add "where ever". When you write free write don't think. Just write, don't worry about rhyme or metter. do not wory about oif your stanza equal out just write, then once you do that go back through create your stanzas and clean it up a bit, but honestly I think this write is very good.
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And another one I missed
This is fantastic!! What a great job you did on this one!
You may not believe you are much good at free verse my dear friend, but I am here to tell you you are amazing with free verse!!
and love
Nyetta
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aw you must like Robert P frost also...
I have come to a conclsussion in life, there is no wrong path and there is no wrong road to travel. and we will always know a path, the one we took and the one we left behind, the path we choose not to travel is left for someone else to explore and some day we will know what it was ...
I do love this write and how you used people more so than roads, Robert Frost wrote one paragraph of his poem sitting in the living room looking out the window than years later finished it with not his exsperiance but a friends that chose to go off to war.
I enjoy this one much more knowing it sends the true message and written from ones heart, it means so much... Awsome write...
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you are increadibly talented,this poem is great.
i would greatly appreciate it if you gave me your opinion on some of my poems.
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I love this poem, is something i would like to say to my boyfriend. Your poem says all the words you would want to say to someone about Hope in the relationship to go on. Great poem i enjoyed reading it.
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Well, considering the Bunny wars,
this seemed like a good choice, for Lane's contest. Well rhymed free verse, with a good topic. I'll get back to my Retournes soon.
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Damn. Can you guide Sherlock out of the fog? He'll hold your hand, I guarantee it! Three bunnies, Bunnies three.
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mmhmm...I agree with Firequeen...i have had this feeling before... no matter what...you don't want to leave the other person...ya...and you described it perfectly here...BRAVO!!!!
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Beautiful
This i can relate to.
this flowed so beautifuly.
i love it.
This is my favorite part
I take your path let’s stay together,
I’ll follow where you go.
Now holding hands forever.
There’s a path we’ll never know.
thank you for sharing and keep up the great writting
Fire
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