Sliding behind the waterfall
my arms, my back, cling to the wall
A torrent cascades over my head
a thunderous sound, o’re the creek bed
Hidden access, secret place
gate that guards the elven race
An arcanum, for a special few
a door that only elves go thru
Sanctuary, now secure,
stories told of elfin lure
Magic comes within these walls
haven here, when danger calls
Elves were here long before man
living in their peaceful clan
So the world has passed them by
protected from its wicked eye
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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Wow this is absolutly beautiful, and it is beautifully written. Wonderful flow and detail work. It was a pleasure to read.
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This poem makes me hurt and I don't know why.
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Secret sanctuary
Mistress, has an elven heart. Dark and Fantasy are two of my favorite genres. Hidden away from our mundane world is a land of secret and magickal. Steal away into it and experience this realm. I'm gonna come back later to read more of your stuff. If you want to return the favor. Read my "Phoenix rising." Thanks for entertaining me this morning, bard
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ohmygod, that is wonderful! personally, i love elves and other medieval fantasies, and this piece truly sets the bar high! love your work!
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Enchanting! (I'll keep saying that too, be warned)..such magic and wonder, and imagery.
I feel like your rhythm and rhyme give so much emphasis to pieces such as this, presented in such legendary and almost mysterious tones, it's really great!
The pictures that compliment your pieces are awesome, perfect!
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bravo
A wonderful and absoluely marvelous poem! I loved it, loved it! Most excellent! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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I wanted to try and read an Elf poem of yours as I am not a huge fan of the genre. Not that I am against it mind you. It is simply that I tend to avoid reading about it (okay, truth be told I have an ex who was obsessed and, frankly, it wore thin FAST - I will never date a fellow RP-er again).
I must admit, I am pleasantly surprised. I think that must be due to the fact that you are so competent in your writing. Most of the time I need to vomit because if the sappy/sweet nature of elven prose(sappy, nature, elves. . .gotta love accidental puns).
Not to belabor the point, but as your PerVirtuous Alan said "It didn't make me want to puke" . . .so here's your bunnies!
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HeHe… thanks, I’m not obsessed. The whole elf thing is for my “elf forest” group. I teach children formal poetry here on Ap. I’m not really an elf. I also love it when you read and comment on my work. I feel so good when my poetry touches someone. If you are still interested, I think my best work is “My Tiger” listed on my page in “Poems I’m Focused on”
Now you did it, I’m going to have to come and see who your are and read all your work.
Love,
Amera
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It didn't make me want to puke. Three bunnies.
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Very nice, youre rhyme doesn't seem forced at all. I like how vividly you describe what you "see".
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YAAAAY~~~!!!!!ELFS RULE!!!!!!!!!!!! princess Amera..your highness...you have done a great job...just as alwayz...XOXOX...im gonna go read more of your poems...BYE!!!
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Enchanting
How i would love to see the world from your eyes,
you write with a delicate beauty
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Very Good
I think this is magical and fun and I love the tale, The elvin kings of ole would be proud, Write on Poet
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Welcome to your contest wishing you the best...
Darling
Your glade and glen
are where mystic love
with high magics within
warm the elflords thereof.
Smoosh
Janet
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