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turning me into a piece of the hot sun ...



Oh my love

I do agree that I said I love you
but the way you smile here in this bed of the room
I am lost in the magic of those smiles of yours
turning me into the piece of air to run away there in the hills

I do agree that I said I wish to kiss you
but the way you look at me with the intriguing eyes of yours
I am lost in the verses of the meaning of those eyes
turning me into a piece of fire to burn away there in the volcano

I do agree that I said you are a heart of mine
but the way you show the naked beauty of yours
I am lost within the wine of a beauty of yours
turning me into a piece of a moon to go away there in galaxies

I do agree that I said I am a mate of your bed
but the way you call me on the bed in a breathtaking manner
I am lost to the mysteries of invitations of yours

turning me into a piece of the hot sun to shine away there in the sky

 

Oh my love

Prabhudayal khattar

Author notes

When you love someone by the heart then it is almost difficult to convince this heart to satisfy itself from the body of the humans...it need something more and if something more is shown ,then ,the heart turns into a divine soul and ,a divine soul does not wish to sleep with a physical mate, it lose its place in the beauty of the flesh somewhere time and time again and love which is a materialistic phenomena turns into the venture of the divine knowledge...

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  • EternalFyre
    January 26, 2007

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    Love is like the sun, especially when passion is played into it. Loved it! Good luck in the contest!


  • Shadow Lynx
    January 24, 2007

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    Love in mind body and spirit,this is a beautiful write,full of feeling and dedication,good luck in this contest


  • CherylAnn
    January 24, 2007
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    WOW AMAZING WRITE

    WOW,WOW,WOW,
    this is just so beautiful.So overwhelming,it just brings one at a standstill...For I do believe that I have just read a masterpiece...I am at a loss for words...
    WOW is really...WOW
    God Bless
    ~Cheryl~


  • Goodolenad
    December 26, 2006

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    oh my goodness! this is spectacularly beautiful. i suppose if all men expressed tehir love in this manner....well i can't explain.

    this is supremely magnificent. wonderful wonderful write!


  • maculiumlad
    December 26, 2006

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    Beautiful work

    As I also say true love comes from a heart of love, I dance my soul every time I am kissed with a love line that is well brougth out from the soul with a deep feel that paint the reality and the beauty of what it takes to love and how it feels to be love or being in love. This is a well construted poem free flow of the heart. It colours paint true Agape love that is not base on lust and emotion or burning desire but that love that is build on a heart of trusth, patient Understanding, tolorance and the abilty to crive thee spiritaulity of the true Master of love. Poet I enjoy your write up and i eencouragee you keep it reall and do not relax but crive for high stand too.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    December 26, 2006

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    This love poem is very spiritual,mysteriously mystical in its' interpretation...The mind,and thought are involved in this love relationship by the author...It is alluring and sensual, but it is unique..It is not like others..It has one intrigued with the thoughts behind the authors' idea of his relationship..Interesting how each stanza starts with I do agree that....Second line third stanza has "the" yours at the end of line...I don't think it is to be there....A unique, moving write.


  • Iohagh
    December 25, 2006

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    Welcome to your contest wishing you the best...

    Darling

    Your sugar into champagne
    makes all reason inane
    you yourself have changed
    only surrender remains sane.

    Smoosh

    Janet


  • janejainejayne gold member
    December 25, 2006

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    Breathtaking!

    This is what I call cerebral love! It is better than carnal love and beyond what we grasp. It is eternal. You words here are incredibly beautiful. Happy New year dear poet, Jane


  • Slowly searching
    December 25, 2006

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    wow

    wow great write!! so deep and full of...everthing! it means so much and tells alot. Very beatutiful. And you authors comment... Great write once again good luck in the contest and pleae accept my appluas!!

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