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†Lust†

Wanting for everything, wanting great beauty

Craving for a lustful taste

In pleasures has fallen upon thee

Smothered withn the darkness

Kissing the flames, burning by brimstone

Deformity is becoming the sin of human race

Acts of lust upon humanity

Forsaken calls,

In a foul beastly manner  

Uncleanness, pertain to sexual desires

Hell monstrous sin is evil

Black determination within the dark fate

It is now,

  The time is hell

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  • December 27, 2006

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    cool i like the way you have portrayed and almost personified lust itself. The way you write is so fascnating the poem is very passionate.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    December 25, 2006
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    I really like this seriesd on the seven deadly sins . . . they are delightfully dark. This one would have to be one of my favorites - this style is definitely suited to your skills as a poet.

    Stay smiling and keep writing

    Polly

  • eyesofgreen
    December 25, 2006

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    Pretty harsh, if you ask me. Smothered like a blue cow - lovely image.
    I feel like this could be a sermon.


  • imperfectperfection
    December 25, 2006

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    Another Masterpiece

    What can I say, this is one of the deadliest sin human can committ and yes I agree with you it's time to go to hell if committed... Very strong impact this poem leaves on the reader.. Very well done hhhhmmmmmmm which one to pick????? *thinking*


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 25, 2006

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    oooooooooohhhhhhhhhhh, this is hot, i mean this is good, it makes me see lust kind of if i was a painter i would paint something based on this keep it flowing

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