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†Sloth†

Slow in work, desires at an ease

Known as salvation, only in a dream

It would be a sanctuary

The sin is thrilled

Mentioning sluggishness

But for effort, little energy for nothing

Expending laziness thrown to the snake pits

Avoidance to be neglected

Asleep in mind, oppress the human thought

And now coming the wages of hell

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    December 25, 2006
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    Did you mean 'snake pits' instead of 'shake pits'? Apart from that this is a beautifully sinful poem . . . I love the creeping slyness that you have endowed sloth with, it works really really well.

    Stay smiling

    Polly


  • imperfectperfection
    December 25, 2006

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    Guilt Rises to the Occassion

    This is one of the most common of all sins we as a human race are capable of and have committed. Honey this yet another masterpiece of yours.. Strong imagery and very well written. It's not easy to choose


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 25, 2006

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    i think i have been guilty of this for a few times, you did a great job expressing this and i loved the way you painted a picture in my head, keep it flowing