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†Gluttony†

 

 Vomiting orange poison

Ripping, swollen burst

Death by feeding orifice

Stretches and bruising muscle

Serving torture and torment

Offensive to swift moment

Pampering impure desire, darken the stomach

Hurling over virtue, consume by fury of fire

Force- fed punishment, nor paradise lost

Linked to pigs

Into flames, denotes to a dark reason

Into sin requires hell

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    December 25, 2006
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    I really like the abstract rhyming you have used in this piece . . . it really shows that you are growing as a poet and ae experimenting with different ways of writing. I found the last line to be especially powerful.

    Stay smiling

    Polly


  • imperfectperfection
    December 25, 2006

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    Strong

    Very strong and impact full imagery that pours the very essence of the word Gluttony. My dear it's very dark and intense. Wow, you are not making it any easier for me to chose the best


  • Tears of Roses
    December 25, 2006

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    Too much for me not into blood and gore.
    Very graphic
    Powerful and bold
    Roses to you
    Teresa


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 25, 2006

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    i repeat you are sister grimm, thisi s good i love this and this and i know you have more coming so keep it flowing