Will you come down to me, and please don't fake it.
Because I feel so vonerable.
I feel like closing my eyes and jumping off this bridge,
into the icy blue water below.
I wish I could take you back. But I know you can't see me,
because I'm just a figment of your imagination.
So listen close as the rain falls down hitting the ground.
I have a growing fear and your the only one who can comfort me.
But because I am so broken I can't tell you anything,and I'm affraid that I'm the only one who realizes what is going on around me.
Because this blood helps me see the missery.
WE are destend to fail.
I tried to warn you what would happen,
but you just turned me away as if I ment nothing more than a picture in a picture frame.
Please revieal to me what you felt inside that night.
I'm starting to lose faith in everything I thought I knew.
And chasing you is like chasing a dream,
it can never be caught, and I just can't let it go,
no matter how much I want to.
I just don't understand how you turned out to be so cold.
Do you feel better now, knowing that I'm falling to the ground?
Do you feel saticfied knowing that you defeated my very reason to live?
So I hope you feel sorrow for all the things you've done to hurt me.
Because the doctor has to tell me to relax and stand still,
for I am filled with anger.
I wish I could make you see what you've done to me.
Written By
Nichole Purvine
Author notes
This was about my dad and how I had tried so very hard to get him back.
A contest entry
- For Our Parents by WhiteAngelCake.
700 points, ended August 18, 2008, 28 entries
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This is one of the saddest poems I have ever read. I can really feel your pain and lost in this poem. It so sad when we lose a connection with are parents.
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This is so sad, and I am sorry this was your experience in growing up. Too many feel this kind of pain that should never be. You did a great job putting some very painful feelings onto paper. One word of advice is to go back and run spell check on this as there are are a lot of spelling errors. Otherwise, great poem
Blessings, Patty
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I have a growing fear and your the only one who can comfort me
o how well do i know this feeling. very good, whatever it is that happened to inspire this i am sorry you had to go through it
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thank you for entering. To be truthful the red on black hurts my eyes and it's very hard for me to read.
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Wow; this was such a powerful write filled with emotion, pain & heartbreak. You've done a beautiful job at conveying these feelings.
Wonderful write!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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It doesn't look like I've ever commented on this poem!
I thought I already did. Sorry. It's a great poem. I'm glad it was entered into my contest.
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Aww
This is such a sad poem Lil'sis Im srry your heart hurts. I LOVE YOU!
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wow, i can't imagine what it must be like to have all this inside you, but you have done a wonderful job of expressing yourself. i hope that someday you will be able to put things feelings in the past. my sympathies.
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Thanks. I hope so too.
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wow. i'm really sorry that this happened to you. i loved the poem.
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