her six foot five panther stood in the doorway,
caramel skin good enough to eat glistened
and not even the jokey santa boxer shorts
cooled her ardour,
she undraped her red silk robe, slowly,
moving hips to the rhythm that was building,
revealing white basque, white stockings
with suspenders,
anticipation writhed like an untamed snake
within her, six months of yearning,
waiting to exchange what they gifted each other,
( they were natural switches)
he grabbed her long, red hair,
told her she was his bitch
as he dragged her to her knees,
teased his man-hood across her body
as he roamed every part of her
with the hunger of a starving man,
pushed her onto the bed,
told her to beg him,
beg him to enter her-
spanked her creamy buttocks
til they were crimson flushed-
still she wouldn't beg
he rammed his thigh, solid as a rock,
between her thighs and felt her pleasure
shudder,taking the thumb and one finger tip
he did that thing that unzipped her,
both circling and probing at the same time
faster, more frenzied til she mewed like
a cat on heat, panted like a she-wolf,
undulated to meet his touch at the same pace
then, then she begged, oh mercy, mercy me,
and he fast-tracked his manhood into her-
upside down over the bed,
pummeled her
took her like a jack hammer
until the darkness lit her mind
bucking her into semi-consciousness
as she slowly flowed back to life
it was with the giggle-icious,
delicious, warmth of her man
spooning merry christmas...
Author notes
nb anonymous contest entry
A contest entry
- Hit me with EVERYTHING. PW OK! by z etoile.
375 points, ended March 28, 2008, 56 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - NAUGHTY or NICE???...xxx... by voodoo ink.
700 points, ended November 21, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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HOTT!!!
WOW!! damn, great sexy as hell write, gosh really u need to do more of these!! i loved this steamy smoking write!
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Swan...
Thankyou, glad you liked this!
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Beautifully Written
I love your powerhouse write. Your feelings so raw yet so very tasteful i give you an A+. Would you collab maybe sometime?
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Wow, where are my socks?
This is such a strong write, plays with fantasy that has been fine-tuned by six months apart. I love 'natural switches' a delicious play on role-playing, as well as a little spanking...you really went close to the edge with this poem, in many ways, but stayed on the top of the abyss, and delivered release in the final, beautiful line. Well done!
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WOW! Someone finally gives me something spicy, just what I was looking for... Oh my, it sounds like someone's getting a nice present...
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I don't know if I am amazed at the piece or the comments LOL... Interesting write sure brought a lot of emotion with various peoples! Write on!
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great
this was full of such erotic images and feelings of such love
so much had happened from first glance to the sigh of contented lovers
marvelous write covering lots of areas of expressing love from caresses to spanking to final penetration to spooning as lovers do.
great
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Ahhhh
Black guy with a big loooonnngggg black dick tears up some red heads silky white ass....and this is a personal spiritual experience of yours, or anyone elses?? This wasn't even a personal encounter even between two people. -
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what makes you think so
personal or fantasy this was a real experience, is it he was black and she white that brought this response?
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The writer played the race card in a sterotype fashion that kind of shits on the human race as a whole, I felt. It is porno in spirit, the kind of stuff southern boys might have wanted to read in the bathroom back in the early 60's. But that wasn't the full reason for my reaction. That they had sex, or rather that she was dragged by her hair, called a bitch, and made to beg for a fucking with his large member (do you get it?), well that might have been it. This was a contest on personal spiritual encounters. To me, this was a bullshit encounter that fed into somebodies dark little jerk off fantasies and had nothing to do with two real people having sex/making love/fucking regardless if they are pink, white, blue, black, yellow.
Why do you ask, and why do you reduce my reaction down to A. him being black, she red, white, with a brusied blue muffin, or B. that they had sex??? There are valid reasons to object to such writings, even if one person is black and the other white, beyond being a racist or prude. Honestly. -
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Whoa,easy tiger,we already discussed this amicably via messages and thought we had an amicable conclusion,why re visit with this loaded reply,I already said I respect your opinion as to it's spirituality,then I recieve this message,you have made all your points loud and clear,your voice is still going to be resonating around cyberspace tomorrow,if you really must leave any more comments at least please leave them with the same kind of respect as you would like to recieve and that I have already paid you.Another poet asked you about race,not I,so please address the poet in question instead of coming to me,everyone has their own opinion but I am not responsible for them.
NB Re your porno comment and the physical interaction,the poem includes the line "they were natural switches" switches switch between being submissive and dominant within the boundaries of their consensual relationship,after 6 months apart from a lover their passion is unleashed and frenetic,I accept you don't like it,I accept it may not seem spiritual too you,I accept that you have a right to an opinion but at no point is there a size of his manhood mentioned yet you mention it in two comments,if this was porn it would be removed by ap,I don't write porn,this was not a bullshit encounter,if you have never experienced 6 months apart from a partner serving in the forces,if you are not a natural switch,if you can only focus on the size of his manhood it shows that you lack imagination to follow the frisson of such frentetic coupling and that you have a complex about the size of your own manhood for you keep refering to the size of the his when no one else is or has until now,let me reassure you,size isn't mentioned of manhoods within any of my writes because it doesn't matter about the gearstick,it's about the careful car driver handling the road well,put your ruler away,lighten up,we are surely here for creativity and not to sling shots around? -
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your right:
sorry: did get carried away, and only later thought this was to be added onto your site. it's how I felt but obviously to many it is not how they feel. Sorry again, not meaning to throw rocks. Dave -
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Thankyou
Dave,thankyou,I understand that you got carried away,I am glad the air is now cleared and though there was a misunderstanding I believe we may both learn from it,I shall be more circumspect about contest criteria in future and you will have an understanding of what we discussed,it's all good when the dust dies down from a storm and again there is the same light of day,peace from across the pond,Yvette
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The poem relays the passion played out after six months apart yearning for the physical togetherness that is a bonus to their spiritual togetherness,during which time they have been honest,faithful and true,the christmas was gifted to each other without any other giving of gifts but one to the other,as your contest specified that erotica was acceptable if it was percieved as spiritual I entered this pre write,I am sorry you disliked it so very much,peace from across the pond
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This was awesome. I think you did a wonderful job. Keep sharing
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that is a great poem and something i loved to read i thought you did a great job thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!
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Now that's what I'm talkin' about!!!!
crazy sexy flow, almost to sweaty to follow!!!!!!!!!!!
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Wow! How very hot and ultra erotic! I think you wrote this most excellently (my word
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Sounds like these two in this piece had a very Merry Christmas, indeed!
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Haha honestly not sure what to say, but my fiance and I just read it and I had to comment. I've never read anything like that, but it was very good. You have a brilliant imagination and way with words. I found the part about "a cat on heat, panted like a she-wolf," quite amusing. My fiance enjoyed the lines "spanked her creamy buttocks
til they were crimson flushed"
I cant think why...lol.
Seriously now, it was an erotic and sensual write especially with some of the earlier descriptions, but your wording was just genious.
Thanks for sharing.
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awe. cute erotic poem. i like it a lot. kudos!
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SOUNDS LIKE A NEW TWIST on A WHITE CHRISTMAS to me!
And a much better one than I or me wife had as we came down with a nastay virus and had to cancell Christmas this year or postpone it anyway! A delightful piece that I am incapable of taking advantage of now as this I feel older than Santa Clause himself.
HOW I SPENT CHRISTMAS EVE up until 12 this afternoon.
I've been in bed and in the bathroom since 9 o'clock Christmas Eve and didn't even have the strength and stamina to wake my computer up! All three members of my household were sick and we had to put a quarantee sign on the door - make many calls - and cancel our Christmas Dinner and Celebration to when we were all feeling better - hopefully this Week End. I haven't had A STOMAGE VIRRUS as develish and as evil as this one for many, many years and don't care to have another one ever like it again especially on Christmas and on my winter vacation where the weather has been rainy and dreary, too! It's the first time I've been up - other to run the the throne (which this KING doesn't hope to have to run to again for at least the rest of this day). 2 days without a shower, shave (I was starting to look like SANTA CLAUSE with a beard as white as snow), and anything to drink except for some blue gatorade, a little tea, ginger ale, and Coke isn't this old sea dogs idea of a Merry Christmas - but hopefully the worst is over - and I'll be a HAPPY CAPTAIN, again - when I get a change to wear my Rudolp Boxers - the ones with the huge and swollen red nose.!
I'm DELIGHTED that your HOLIDAYS were sweeter and merrier than the one above, Darling.
Peace & Love!
Earl.
I'll have to come back to read this one again when things are looking up - for right now - all they do is hang down low! More than worth of my last applauses of the day!- for it's time to rest and hallicinate - again.
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Scoop me up with deep spoons..!!
You know, when I think of "spoons" - and don't laugh - this kind of spooning is exactly what I think of
. Oh, wow...this one was so hot enough to spice up any winter night (or day for that matter). I have told you this before, but you are so talented in writing in this genre, my friend - and I so enjoyed these spoonfuls of "Christmas"!! The only problem is that for a woman alone, it is quite hard to read and swallow the "delicious warmth" and the "that thing that unzipped her" you've penned here - shame on you !! So wonderful when two people are "natural switches".... sighs. Wonderfully penned....smooth, sensual, sexy....soooo good!!
~ Nicolette
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this was hot and you did a good job with the descriptions. i do like the way you described the way he took her. thank you for entering the contest and good luck.
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Hmmm... puts a whole new meaning to wrapping it up in a ribbon. I would comment further but I have this sudden urge to grab my wife and share some Christmas joy.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year,
John
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the title drew my attention right away i did not expect it to be the perfect last line also... holy cow woman... blow my socks off!
i found not a single flaw... this is as smooth as smooth could be
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I'll tell ya, I thought it to be quite good. The little humor nuggets (boxers, last line) made it exceptional to me.
I am no stranger to sexuality, sex, sensuality, and raw passion. But these passages open the eyes a bit.
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