I'll tell you what you ever want
I'll tell you what you've never known
I'll hold your hand and take you home
I'll wipe your tears and earase your pains
You're on fire when he speaks
and i'm burning when you breath
You're on fire when he stares
and I'm burning when you near me
You're on fire when he leaves
I will follow you wherever you go
leave me one more time alone
give me all your love again
give me one more life to live near you
I'm saying more than empty words
that fills your head without any hurt
You're on fire when he whispers
and I'm burning when you cry
You're on fire when he laughs
and I'm burning when you hide behind
You're on fire when he sleeps away
I will hold you forever in my heart
leave me one more time alone
give me all your love again
give me one more life to live near you
I'm saying more than empty words
that fills your head without any hurt
You're on fire when he speaks
and i'm burning when you breath
You're on fire when he stares
and I'm burning when you near me
You're on fire when he leaves
I will follow you wherever you go
You're on fire when he whispers
and I'm burning when you cry
You're on fire when he laughs
and I'm burning when you hide behind
You're on fire when he sleeps away
I will hold you forever in my heart
You are my mystories ....... mystories
Please tell me what you think
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unrequited love? we've all been there. the grammatical mistakes breathe has an e on the end i'm on fire when you breath(e), and 'you're on fire he sleep' should be sleeps. otherwise a very good write well done, keep up the good work!
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wow
wow this poem is very wonderful but yet very sad.
You showed your emotions & your feelings of sadness.
This is a very good piece and I understand it very
well.This is a great write good job.
~SHIRREE~<3 a.k.a ~Ocean Dreams
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Nice emotions and this poem is filled with true feelings of sadness and longing for love. Simple choice of words make it easily readable & understandable. It forms nice imagery & nicely put forward your feelings.
Honey, I don't mean to hurt your feelings for this is your personal sadness that you have poured from your heart, but there are grammatical mistakes here and there, though I'm not even close to grammar myself, it would make it little more easier to the reader & make the correct sense of the sentence. Sorry again if I've hurt your feeling, that is not at all my motive.
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no problem
no problem at all but if u can help just give me the mistakes and the correction !!
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