Rising as a crescendo, falling as a ritard
Soft, staccato clouds turn the world hazy
Making it hard to find a fleeing melody,
Portraying the deeper meaning,
We are too blinded by the rhythm to see.
Eclipse of sound,
As an octave fades out.
And it leaves on a high note,
Falling beyond distant, golden hills.
A final, vibrato chord ringing,
The last notes of the day disappear
Into shining sparks of hope,
Conducted by waning possibility.
Author notes
I use to have a giagantic explaination here explaining all the poem's metaphors. Basically it's linking the sun to an orchestra. It compares a song of the orchestra to a day-the sun rising, setting, the moon and stars appearing.
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It iws Easy
to see why this poem has placed several times. It is well written, and I like the use of portrayal to an orchestra. Thank You for Sharing!
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You did great!
Heehee, it is fun when I try to figure out the meaning of the poem by myself, but then again if I am to judge the pieces, I have to understand them fully.
Thanks a lot for your HUGE explanation, definitely well-analyzed poem! I wasn't expecting that much but I am definitely impressed by everything you wrote!!!
When I first read your poem - before I came to the Authors notes - I understood there was some kind of comparison between the sun and the music... What I find great is that I discovered that you linked them through a metapohor! And you are actually metaphoring the sun into the music!!! Great idea! And through the variations of the sound created by an orchestra. I loved your plays on words. They are perfect. Glad I gave you inspiration to write this
You did all the work really lol.
Good luck!
Lady anairO
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