Variegated reflections,
amalgamated four seasons,
silent kaleidoscopic
adornment on your face.
Harp
warped waving crescendo
dance, sudden
romance with scattered rays.
An elusive sun,
alive, trapped
inside your eyes
once more, like a honey drop within a marble shard.
Author notes
- Amalgamated four season– when you can see the meaning of life out of space and time when yo are focused on your lovers eyes
- Harp are imaginative sound coming from the heavens – you can hear it in only in your heart
- Sun is coming through the church colored glass
- Sacred moment when you just want to say – “I do”, (not only a weding day).
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Wow. Original idea to use the harp for its sound only - unique idea, I think you're the only one in the contest to not have worked on the physical aspects of instruments - which is great! What I liked is that your poem reaches out to a feeling, and also that it is both in a precise moment in time as well eternal. Very good link around love. Creation of atmosphere in this poem was superb!
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Beautiful
Great beautiful images brought to mind with your words.
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Thank you. Merry Christmas dear friend.
~Sonja~
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This is a beautiful poem, and such wonderful descriptions throught the whole piece!
I really liked the harp:
Harp
warp waving crescendo
Oh, that is beautiful. And your author's notes are great, you have created a wonderful poem.
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Thank you dear Susie. I am glad that you like it.
Merry Christmas
~Sonja~
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Wow! Blown away!
Very beautiful piece. I liked its structure, and the adjectives you used to create atmosphere. Very pleasant piece to read, I loved the vocabulary you used too. Very sophisticated
One tiny little problem...you forgot to write the meaning in the ACs!
In your brief explanation, please include a) the metaphor(s),
where are the stringed instruments in your poem, and c) where is the sun in your poem, and all the meanings of these.
I make my contest-enterers do that because I am LOST without your help. I am NOT intelligent enough to understand your metaphors alone!!!
Lady anairO
Artiste.
Ps: If need to contact me do it through Authors Notes, if you reply to this then I will know who you are and I like the hidden author thing to be on. thanks!
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