butterfly
butterfly beauty
sailing on the gentle wind
enjoy your short life
life's over too soon
though impressive it may be
shall soon be forgot
so sail on your way
live your life to the fullest
all too soon it’s gone
Dee Garner
May 24, 2003
Author notes
I watched a butterfly today and thought about it's beauty and that it's short life would probably be over tomorrow....way too short for a creature of such beauty....and it made me think of our own lives, over all too soon
Written May 24th, 2003
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Lovely butterfly haiku chain. I love butterflies.
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Lovely picture of the butterflies. The poem is beautiful. Great write. Butterflies are my favorite insect.
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Very beautiful haiku chain. I love butterflies. The butterfly symboloizes "joy", in the chinese culture. But I am korean-american.
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Very beautiful haiku. I love butterflies!
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Beautiful
very beautiful...I wrote "Butterfly", poem. Would you like to read my butterfly poem? -
I love butterflys and this is so very pretty. You're so very true with what you said in the author notes..it sort of gave me chills to think about it...
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Dee, Buterflies are an excellent subject for Haiku. Your three haiku echo the frailty and short lived glory of these beautiful creatures. Your series of haiku seem to stress a fatalistic tone...(just my opinion). Keep writing friend,
Dennis
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Beautiful poem and message i like haikus they are short enough to keep my poor attention i will be sure to read more of your works!
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Its a shame that butterflies' lives are short, they're so beautiful, they should live longer, you have written a superb piece catz, keep it up
best wishes as always
~Moonstone Virgo~
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this is absolutely beautiful!!! i am going to work my way through your haiku's so that i can get an idea of what they are. viyanna
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I'll never look at a butterfly the same way again. I didn't realize they spend more of their time as a caterpillar and then a cocoon then they do in all their glory. There is a story in there, I'm sure, lol.
Even though this was written earlier, it still bears a lovely message. One of those never aging writes. Loved this, Dee!!! -
Thank you very much for the critique of my write "Metamorphosis".
Yours is very well done, artisitc and simplistic in an emotional sense. It gets to the point of the shortened lifespan, and encourages what we all try for. Well done. -
Wow, this is a beautiful poem
I shall read more of your works!
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nice haiku
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Butterflys are beautiful. I love them. They are my Grandmas favorite. She collects them. Nice job. A simple yet beautiful poem.
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i thought that was so touching i loved it
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awww this deep but with a sweet essence
butterlfies are so delicate and i guess
out lives are too-every decison we make
leads us in a direction-i'm thankful that
God says 'nothing happens without going through
his hands first'
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i read this to my mom she loves butterflys and is almost obsessed about them but she loved it and thought that it was great it tells just what a butterflys life is. i think its great myself and i love how you had done it. hiaku's are just perfect and there my favorite form of writing except i cant write them well. this is a great write .
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Indeed - life is over too soon. Within a blink of an eye it can be wiped away. Beautiful poem and message. And I like how you spiced it up with a pretty pic too
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Catz~
Ironic-How something so small and beautiful can inspire one to write a poem.
Beautiful write. I love butterflies. Short and sweet, excellent excellent write. I love the pic aswell!
~Kati.
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Beautiful!
This is so precious. I have had the experience of butterflies landing on me, and I love the feeling of me connecting with something so natural and beautiful, without the care that their life is short lived. Ours is as well if we really give it some thought. We should live each day like tomorrow will not come. This poem has many levels of feeling for me, and it is a beautiful write. Thank you for the plesentries, and realities.
Thank you very much for all the womderful comments you leave on my poetry. You are an inspiration to me.
Much Love,
Renee
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Goshness, this one's great Dee! It's short and to the point and it reminds us that our lives are short, beautiful and fragile, not unlike butterflies Thanks for posting this, it definitely sctruck a chord!
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Good
May the blessings Be forever and not be as fleeting as the butterfly and greet you today and follow you through your every tomorrow. Godspeed and best wishes 24/7 and always henceforth and forevermore 
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i apologize for whatever was said here mam , my little brother thought it would be funny to go around saying that , i really apologize and it will not happen again .. i assure you
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lovely
This is a very beautiful string of Haiku, I think they call these Renga. I love this, it also reminds me of my "Speed of Life", "Younger Than Young", and "Luna Moth" ... Here's a BIG
of thanx for posting this. And thanx for your cool comment on "Owe Saddam".
USpace
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Excellent !!
This is such a " Tender Joyful " piece. I also think Mortal beings should heed this as well. Live beautiful people like today is your last !! My favorite part is all of it !
butterfly
butterfly beauty
sailing on the gentle wind
enjoy your short life
life's over too soon
though impressive it may be
shall soon be forgot
so sail on your way
live your life to the fullest
all too soon it’s gone
This oiece seems to whisper to me , Very well written !
Yertweetyness -
Aww. Beautiful write, Dee. I never really thought of butterflies that way. Such beauty should live on for a longer time. I like this haiku. I don't read many of them, so be honored I like this. doesn't really enjoy most haikus, but likes this one Bravo! CrimsonHeart claps
CrimsonHeart -
A lovely poem.
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This is a great poem. It is amazing how the really short life of a butterfly can represent the not so short life of humans, but we don´t usually do all what we want to do and then, all of a sudden you realyse life IS short and you´re not enjoying it as you should. Liked this piece veryy much (like all you´ve posted!!!). It´s nice to read your poetry again, hopefully I´ll be back more often!
Maru -
Do Not Touch It!
*AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW* That's such a sweet poem and it is such a good way to relate to our own lives..such beauty and truth in this poem..Made me think too..there's so many things I haven't done yet in life..and I wondered how sad it would be..if I died without even trying to achieve all that I could..N e wayz hehe I'm just blabbing on now hehe..but you did a GREAT job..and I LOVE your background and the picture..it's all *simple* yet *beautiful* hehe thanx soo much for sharing! Keep up the great work! -
Are you a butterfly dreaming of being a woman
or a woman dreaming of being a butterfly?
ty for all your kind words to a poor insane man
~~ Quothorn ~~
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This poem describes butterflies so perfectly. Simple and beautiful. It's really an amazing poem. I'm not a very good poet AT ALL, but I hope you'll read some of mine. Maybe you could give me some tips. Beautiful write. Thanks for sharing.
~*Ebie
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Amazing!
I think its amazing how people could be inspired to write poems about just everyday things, Im sure we've all seen butterflies but you actually wrote a poem about it and the poem had such a strong message to it which I think everyone should understand, life IS too short and you blew me away with this poem.. so beautiful
~Good Job~
MaLz -
I remember when I was little I cried when I found out that butterflies only live for, like a couple of weeks. It's sad that something so beautiful must die so early in its life. I loved your poem.
Make it funky.
~Jessica~
dangerous-angel -
wonderful
Wonderful write
The words are very true...human beings are a lot like butterflies...
I especially like the words:
'so sail on your way
live your life to the fullest
all too soon it’s gone'
Thanx for sharing.
Thanx for your kind comment on my poem, Mum
Take Care,
From
Di
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tis true we are only here for a short while and you have captured it well. thank you for the post
blessed be;
shaggy wolf -
very good write yet short to i like to write short poems do you ever think about if your life will be that short yet i know it wont be or maybe it will we can never know but that was a short good poem lol
:d keep them coming ill put you in my fav poets list ok?? keep them a comin lol ~Hannah~
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Wonderful
What a beautiful poem. It's so true how we never realize how short our lives are- and I personally don't think it's fair that humans live a long properous life when a butterfly, with such beauty and grace, will only live a few days/weeks. Wonderful portrayl of this idea, especially since I've always loved Haiku. Wonderful job expressing such a thought in such strict form and short lines.
~Zeek -
This is so lovely and touching...We should all stop and think about how we waste minutes in our own lives every day. Very nice.
~Jessie~ -
What a different way to describe life. If i'm not mistaken, you used the butterfly to describe just how short live really is and if we are not careful we will miss life, because like the butterfly that flies and so free spirited it has no idea what is just around the corner.
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Awww.. this is so lovely. There really is a peaceful calm to it, as well as a simply majestic beauty. Thank you for sharing this lovely piece.
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spiffy
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the fragile sound of the butterflies life sounds sad. i think you've captured the beauty of it, but interesting that you've found the saddness of the brief existence in the world. i wonder how appropriate that metaphor is to our existence. thank you for allowing me to ponder. thank you for sharing.
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Bravo
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this is a short and simple, and cute little piece here which could also hold a message for people as well as insects
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A lot of wisdom in this write...yes, it is gone all too soon, isn't it?
I like the way you spread your wings
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The poem is also brief like life, flitting above eternity gazing down at this given reality that will fade with time. Very true sentiment here, catz. Gently said like the breeze against my cheek.
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Ah, yes .. so true, so true, so true ..
here and then gone
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beautiful haikus Dee!!!! The analogy of the butterfly, representing how short life really is, packs a powerful punch, yet in such a tender and touching way!!! It makes one think that God in all His wisdom must know what he's doing to create such a beautiful creature only to have it's life cut so short...in it's way, this is quite an inspiring write...beautifully done Dee!!!
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awww pretty, nice picture, pretty background, good words great work
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Ahh, short and sweet, just like the life of the poor butterfly. A moments glimpse of beauty fluttering past shown so well. I love it.
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What a lovely combination of haikues! I think this poem is beautifully composed, and there is a message of each and everyone of us, not just those gorgeous butterflies! Nicely written and wonderful piece!
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In my humble opinion I believe butterflies to be one of the most beautiful of creaures.The vibrant colors and the grace and delicatness of them is soothing and serene.Here you've put into words just that.The sweet delicate nature of the butterfly along with the short lives they have. You did such a wonderful job with this piece. So sweet, gentle and perfect.The flow is great and the picture is cute as well. Nice Job!
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cool poem...that consept of life being over too soon is true for us too...hmmm...food for thought...its also true for us that even though we make think we did something really cool like i don't know make a new flavor of ice cream no one is gunna remember that when we're dead cuz the only thing that really counts are what we did for God and what we did for other people....wow-that was kinda sidtracked of the butterfly thing. good write...
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This is beautiful very sweet, clear its adorable thanks for sharing
amber
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Like the butterfly though, Dee we too enjoy a beauty within, for the short time we have. Some let it show, clearly. Others tend to keep it hidden or camouflaged. Great work -tj-
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Aww this was so pretty. I had beautiful mental images in my head, that shows a true talent. Great write here.
Sing to me
The Song
Of the stars
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It's a short simplistic piece but it holds ground for the type that it is. A lovely piece here.
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this was awesome!!
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Ah... how we take so much for granted. Little do we realize we could be gone in the wink of an eye. As you know that lession came back to me once more just weeks ago. Though I always knew it was coming, there were still times I let things slide, left them for another day. But all too suddenly that "another day" was no more. Again I learned an important lesson.
(((HUGS)))
Pat
I found some really great butterfly pictures at WebShots.com. Their software is fantastic and the pictures are fabulous...
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Tender
Hi Catz,
Such a lovely piece even in the sadness of passing of life,
so true it isn't promised, and can be gone for anyone at any age.
But this is still carefree and is a tender piece its nicely presented dear one....(Thanks for your comment) It was nice to see you again.... Blessings to you, Sherry
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cute poem but it isn't haiku. I notice up that it's "haiku" but is it? I don't think so.
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beautiful piece I can't wait to read some of your others
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Gee...this just says everything you need to know in life. Everyone always says to live life to the fullest, because you never know when you might lose it. I've always thought that it was good advice, but the way you put it makes it seem even better. I like how you talk to the butterfly and tell it a message. It brings out a new perspective on life, for me at least.
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Oh how beautiful indeed my dear. As always, your words forge the picture perfectly. Thanks for sharing.
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I love it, it's beautiful. I also love the backgrounds that you have on here. I need to become a preferred member so I can hve them too. Once again, great poem. Two Thumbs Up!
SD -
haikus haikus haikus...so short...but you manage to pull them off the way i think they're supposed to be...
i love the way you keep the flow...
it makes it so easy to read and understand...
i think butterflies are like happy people...they fly and fly and fly, then die...
how sad...anywho...*thumbs up on the haiku things...
peace
chris -
it's sad that a butterfly's life is so short...
I never forget certain butterflies that have made some sort of difference to my day...
I remember in grade 2 or 3, I was at a swimming pool and I found a butterfly in the pool, so i took it out of the water and tried to put it in the sun to dry off so it could fly again...I actually think it worked...:)
and also in elementary school, on a field trip to the lake, a butterfly landed on my finger and I was so happy, cuz that had never happened to me before:)
I really liked this poem because it was so simple, and brought back those memories, which I wouldn't have thought of really without reading this...
thanx:)
by the way, I just got back from that provincial drama trip i was telling you about and posted a bunch of poems about it:) I hope you have time to read one or so:) I had so much fun
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Yow Dee I'm impressed!
That last Haiku is spot on.
Kyla -
My mother simply adores butterflies, and pathetically, I fear them. But this points out to me their beauty and their gracefully short lives. Very nice work.
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Life is waaaaaay too short...that is the one certainty in it all. Why i never understand people who don't wanna stay on the ride till the very end. Life can indeed be difficult...but it sure beats the alternative. Made me think a lot with this one, Dee. Thanks.
UB
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So sweet. Butterflies do inspire to poetry, don't they? So fragile
in their beauty. Lovely haiku set, you expressed the thought so
vividly in such few words. That is truly a gift.
Jen
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I was just thinking the same thing you said in your comment. Sort of like us. Life is much too short. I know someone else who observes nature, like butterflies, squirels etc and writes about them but never posts them. You know who I mean.
I think he should post them and show his gentle side. This is beautiful Dee as everything you write is. Must be the gypsy in you.
Desiree
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short, sweet and greet. I love it and I love the mural-like picture:)
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this was a grand write indeed. I enjoy it so very much. I thank you so very much for shareingit with all us
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lovely poem and image. Good job!!
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Dee,
I truly felt the beauty in this poem.. I love the butterfly and how much freedom that it has.. They see more than we will ever see in lifetime...
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Dee this is beautiful.. I love Haiku's ..haven't done any for ages.. must remind myself to read this again.. so it'll inspire me to write a Ku again lovely set hun
~GILL~xx
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