My dear love,
Image of you dance in my eyes like lit up stars in the evening sky. A fond wonder you are and that is why my calendar is marked 365. Indeed, there are 365 days within a year and no day passes me by without my thoughts turning to you. Some well may call it an obsession but to me it is more like an addiction.
I know it is inexpressible and arcane, but daily birds fly out with my thoughts as I scan beyond the blues to unravel a sheer picture of you. Although my heart is fatigued and fettered by my fantasies, nothing can hinder these adoring feelings of mine. True indeed, a hero is more than someone who just wins fights, with that concept in mind; nothing can really smite the hunger that has me striving here and beyond. Thus, when love triggers a heart, there's nothing one can do but to hope at the end of the day something is conquered.
Oh sweet dearest, there's nothing better I rather quaff than the wine of your soul. As you can tell, I am blown away by your raving beauty. Surely, I wonder if you'll ever assuage my hunger pain. Many of a time I sit there mumbling about the same very thought, you, you and you. Maybe I am intoxicated by your love, if so, oh Lord what a sweet drug? I don't know how far I must soar, where I must go, but God knows I am spiritless without you. Who would have thought that hope could ever be as heavy as despair?
If it is my conviction to love you and you not to love me in return, dear; stay with me as memories. Where the rays do not filter, let your shadow walk the steps. your silence says everything but I am not mad; instead, I thank God for I have loved you faithfully. God forbid something bad to ever happen to you. May He too disregard how you prostrate me and give you the satisfaction of redemption. A heart is not loved until one can see pass all of the obstacles and frustrations that avail one to move on forward.
P.s, I love you...
Author notes
1)Unacquainted love; loving someone who isn't in love with you or doesn't love you back.
A contest entry
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1225 points, ended December 4, 2007, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Wow this is really nice,
a wonderful write
Thanks for entering
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Lovely...you are a very talented writer. Thank you for your entry
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This is absolutely beautiful Mack! And you are competing with me in a contest!
You are such a beautiful person I don't know what the judge is looking for but your words take my breathe away always. There is so much love and compassion in your soul!
Fill your allpoetry page with all these words don't ever stop writing for anything!
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Ok this really wasnt what I was looking for but it is a nice poem. I really know the feeling but you really dont specify the situation behind this. Thank you for entering it in my contest thought and good luck.
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this is really touching and a great write to boot, however, this contest was inended for the person you are dating, not for the one you long for. thanks for your entery and best of luck to you.
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Absolutely amazing I had these similar feelings for someone in the past. Told him I would always love him even though he never loved me. And now he hates me for marrying my husband and not him. Ran into him recently and he totally shot me down, but he said he didn't love me in the first place. And now his memory... I used to long for it. Now the longing is gone I cried for one day when he shot me down, but it healed years of longing ooh now thats a good poetic line huh? This is what this write made me think of. Great job!
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very interesting how you juxtaposed addicted and obsessed there inviting the reader to truly think about what you meant by that. this is more prose than poetry, but the expression and imagery are well worded and weaved. i like how this reads like a love letter gone wrong and the whole story leaves me wanting to know more.
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Lovely
Beautiful poem, This truely pulls off a poetic love letter. Your metaphors were lovely, I especially like "daily birds fly out with my thoughts" (is that a metaphor?) Regardless, your word choice was wonderful. I love the first stanza about the 365 days in the year. If you want the poem to flow better I might suggest changing the last line in the first stanza though. The poem is great the way it is, but I think you could take it even farther if you worked on the flow. Anyway, great job!!!
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Congrats on the bronze trophy. You have expressed such deep and powerful emotions in this... it's hard not to fall for your passionate words myself. If this had been written to me I would have helplessly fallen for you.. amazing work.
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Crazy for lov'in you
If love could support all one's need's it truely would be a lazy sport.
Like the old cliche it takes two too tango. My thoughts are the simple fact that structure is founded, then accentuated with loving experience.
Never give your spirit and all it's beauty completely to another, this would be cause for imbalence which leads to a blurred sence of focus. God love you, and always remember you are loved regardless.
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oh and by the way...
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This is so beautiful. I really do not know what to say about it. When you read it it's almost as if the writer has written it expressly for you, it just seems to capture your heart and imagination. I loved every second opf this peice and as I am writing I find my mind lingering upon it. You have left an impression! Good luck in the contest!
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This was a good poem. It read very well. I can see why it wom a bronze trophy. Keep up the good writing.
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you certainly deserved a trophy for this write its very gracefully written well done
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Grats on the bronze trophy, you deserve it. I have felt like this before and still do about some people. You captured the feels well. Thanks for sharing, I hope to see mroe of your work in the future.
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congrats, it's really beautiful
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Thank you for your beautifully worded entry, Josephine
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This is a wonderful poem, and thanks for your entry, but I will have to disqualify you because it's a love poem. Feel free to enter any of your other poems though! (Just not about love
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Wow, wow, and WOW
You say English is you THIRD language? And you almost died not knowing what an offering of chicken meant? And that you started to learn English at the age of 16? Am I correct?
Well.
Erm.
Hmmmm.
Whall.
Wat op deeske aarde kan ek skryf wat hierdie PRAGTIGE brief sal oortref? ROLL EYES.
What can I say?
Myra
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wonderfull
thank you for entering with this very deep and love filled write , i wish that someone would write to me with such intensity of feeling as yo uhave put itno this letter good luck in the contest with this amazing write
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Ok, now find me someone who can pen such beautiful words to me and I'll jump on a plane right now! Awesome and anyone who recieved a letter or piece of poetry prose like this would be head over heels.
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what an absolutely wonderful love note!! if i recieved one half as well written i may just faint!
wonderful! even in your letter format you maintained a sense of rhyme! -
This is spectacular. I don't know how to even describe how I feel when I start reading this. How great of a writer are you? This is indeed love at its best.
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beautiful
*melts slowly into oblivion*
wow God knows I am spiritless without you! You are so intense my sweet Haitian!
Hope as heavy as despair what a comparison. That is so true.
wow Haitian I so love reading your poetry for it sings to me and warms my soul causing my heart to ache for the love you speak of! Why must a man so full of love and value be so far away?
My heart goes out to you from miles away and soars on kisses in the winds! mwahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh Give me moreeeeeeeeee!
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Melancholy & Beautiful
Obsessed, and addicted...You have it bad! My heart is heavy because I don't think she gets who you are and what love you would give. I love the words; "inexpressible and arcaned".
"Who would have thought that hope could ever be as heavy as despair?"
What a haunting, heart-felt line. It is not often that a writer makes me gasp for air in wording. That line burdened my heart.
You are entirely smitten. There is no doubt in my mind of your undying love for this woman. She must be the epitome in your spirit. I do hope that someday she returns all that you spill from your soul.
This is one of the most beautiful love letters I have witnessed in quite a while.
Absolutely touching and heart-wrenching.
Much Love & Merry Christmas to you dear man. ♥
Renee
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Very heartfelt and beautiful write. It is full of stong feelings and emotions which come through with every word. How beautiful you have penned your heart. Great job.
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