Each mask that we meet, bears a name
that’s revealed at the start of each dance.
Life can be a wonderful game,
when each action is viewed as a chance ~
Don’t let regret eat you alive; Pause,
then reflect on how far you have come.
Ghosts of all that might have been
are warm whispers you roll off your tongue.
Our lifeblood’s the sun at midnight
and “I love you” ~ the siren’s song.
Reflections in the real world wake
desert blue and the color of dawn,
rising somewhere East of Eden -
as the moon drifts slowly away;
across that sea of stars we still wander -
while our dreams take leave for the day!
What will still the heart of matter
when the longest of moments reveal,
in rapture or in solitude -
each day we must face what is real?
How do you do? Or what is new?
Is your mask just a front for the blind?
I heard my friend say his was slipping
all the while that I never wore mine …
Reflections of the real world -
as your true self waits to be seen;
Midnight knows her ~ the flame moth too
and life is this wonder-filled dream ...
© 2006 Joy A Burki-Watson
Author notes
#5 Mask
A contest entry
- Allpoetry Book Project: Teen Inspiration. Win $100 / $30 by Kevin.
600 points, ended April 2, 2007, 57 entries
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The lovely flow of this fit so well with the theme of life as a 'wonder-filled dream'.
A beautiful pieace.
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"all the while that I never wore mine …"
Looking in at joy of some years ago---
and liking it---the whole premise,
the descriptions....
Life---as seen by joy---
Quite a wondrous piece!
M-C
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Great job
I love, your, 4 through 8 lines was my favorite, and I agree with you about don't regret, because it does eat you alive. If you stop and realiz how far you care is a good thing when someone work on there self they are trying to better their self. Your poem has a lot of meaning. The flow of words seem to go natually
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How do you understand me here!?
Language is a form of mask, but it is real. It is our main tool, and it is a part of us. -
Ahhh the great masquerade,
the never ending halloween party.
This is true poetry for the fact that it encompasses so many facets of human behaviour.
So often in these roles we play we truly lose ourselves
we don't know what we are anymore.
Just a grand piece that includes society and the ruff and tumble road we travel.
To say the least your comments and your addition to my guest book are enhanced ten fold now that I am aware of your fine writing skills.
It was very beautiful and sweet lass.
My Irish grand mother used to tell me...
Lowell...
Write something grand,
for you may be
entertaining Angels,
Unaware.
She was always right.
Peace always lass,
LOWELL POE
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Beautiful. I enjoyed this poem thanks for sharing it. Thanks also for entering my contest.
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Beautiful Feel
My name, Naked Adam, is a concise version of this poem's theme: we are naked before God. There are no masks, though we try to cover ourselves, we can't succeed. We can only fool mortals and perhaps, sadly, ourselves. Thanks for writing this poem! Aloha.
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This is Brilliant -- Outstanding
So Beautifully Written
"Is your mask just a front for the blind?
I heard my friend say his was slipping
all the while that I never wore mine …"
You are "transparent," that is: honest.
WHAT TALENT
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awesome
inspirational to all that are afraid to dream, I think if we don't dream we can't create and we loose our faith and hope. GOD BLESS I am trying to give you five stars let me know what I am doing wrong
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Don’t let regret eat you alive; Pause,
then reflect on how far you have come.
Ghosts of all that might have been
are warm whispers you roll off your tongue.
stunning!
thank you so much for your entry!
good luck =] -
"Reflections of the real world -
as your true self waits to be seen;"
this is beautiful. it seems to reflect a lot of life and the world in a pretty way, but it goes deeper than that. i must agree with the previous comment in that this is a wonderful philosophy! keep writing!
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wonderful philosophy
When I read your work, I feel that you have experienced deeply in your life, because I can sense the emotion in your poem with the philosophies of experience. It seems to me that you have chosen to walk a path where you have faced the negatives and dealt with them. This assures that the best part of your life is still to come. I certainly hope so.
The poem is vivid and full of hopeful imgery. It is inspirational and makes me feel happy and content to live this life of mine. Thank you.
Richard
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"and life is this wonder filled dream"!!! What an amazing piece Joy and so beautiful. It seems we are one in the same mind my friend. Superb...mal
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I wonder why I never saw this contest. Anyway, this one was a worthy entry. Your attitude and philosophy parallel mine so closely. Best wishes in all your future endeavors.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
Beautiful
Joy this really was a 'joy' to read, sorry about that (LOL). What a super poem, I have read this poem over several times and still find something new to think about. It is simply wonder-filled! Julie.
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I have been very touched by your poem, dear joy ...
your metaphoric language is most dear to my heart and resonates perfectly with my soul ...
"Is your mask just a front for the blind?
I heard my friend say his was slipping
all the while that I never wore mine …"
your true self exposed nakedly to the world lifts the ephemeral veils of all those you meet ...
I guess it is really time that we take a cup of tea together, dear one ... your soul moves mine profoundly ...
much love,
marion
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'can be, ' - no comma. and is a bit cliche right there... also with 'eat you alive' nice linebreak with 'pause' 'flame moth too' was poetic but vague... lifebood is the song - interesting and nicely poetic. Thanks!
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i enjoyed this wonder -filled dream...the smooth flow of words and some beautiful expressions are very nice...
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Excellent
Wow! This is outstanding...I enjoyed it immensly
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The imagery is great. I can see all the things you write about here. I enjoyed reading this and keep up the writes!!
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this brought to me many colors of life-desert blue,color of dawn....with this wonder-filled dream...
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I like poems that are a bit more broken up or like freeverse i guess, i couldn't 'get into' this one but it seems quite nice and inspirational
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