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~Existents~

 




Sea salt breezes

brush cliff side thoughts

as the sun's rays cast

a blinding glare

on the ocean surface

 

Like a liquid hammer,

waves violently pummel

delicate soils below

into a submissive erosion

 

Watching from above

on the cliff's edge;

I can see

the minute crumbling

washing back into the surf


In the distance,

serenity's melody begins;

peacefully hummed

with the setting sun

 

The rise of the moon

brings forth a tranquility

that kisses away the bruises

left behind on the cliff's surface

from an overbearing aquatic fist

 

And when the sun rises

once again, so does the question

as to the length of time left

for this cliff's existents


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  • poetryality silver member
    December 23, 2006

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    "Like a liquid hammer,
    waves violently pummel
    delicate soils below
    into a submissive erosion"

    What a brilliantly metaphorical visual you've write in this stanza. I can see all of this, even hear the roar of the waves.

    I understand your need to read metaphors in other works because you present them effortlessly. I know how complicated it is to make them flow freely. You do this with ease.

    This is a breathtaking work of emotional word-art.

    Simply Elegant!


    Much Love ♥

    You Mom L


  • Blazing White Wolf
    December 23, 2006

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    this is a deep write, My lioness some reflective mopments in all this nice imagery you have penned here well done
    Love,
    Master