You promised never to hurt me,
and denied it when you did;
you puzzled why I was afraid of you,
as I withdrew in fear, and hid.
What you actually did was nothing:
just a handslip to fulfill
your fantasies and desires,
but completely confusing my will.
It was nothing like the girl who got raped,
night after night in her room,
"she survived unscathed," they scold
"Why shouldn't you," they presume.
because you're just a drama queen,
always wanting attention,
"that Diane", they say,
her names not worth a mention.
No one has ever understood
the havoc of my life,
accused of self-creating
all turmoil, guilt and strife.
And I never could communicate,
what was really wrong;
just pathetic attempts here and there,
while trying to play along.
It's true life now is my fault,
my own sin I can't erase,
I embrace my responsibility,
but I still get stares of disgrace.
And even friends make me feel crazy,
though I know their trying to be kind.
"Who are 'they' you ask", Implying
Something's wrong with my mind.
I no longer can tell good or evil in others,
who is my friend or foe?
Interpretation of reality is blurred,
fear hides any glow.
Child abuse - the hidden terrorism,
that no one wants to uncover,
meanwhile children are suffocating,
unable to reach out to another
fellow human being, if you truly care,
please find a way to give of yourself,
to ones in silent despair.
You may or may not be attracted to us.
Our appearance may make you shudder,
our manners may make you cringe in disgust,
and our speech might make you scutter;
But none of this is our fault;
we are trying to tell you something:
"be outraged not by me,
but by only what you see -
the fruit of a poisonous tree,
choking and making me unfree:
I'm not very eloquent in speech,
so it's easy to dismiss,
bad rhyme, and unmetered verse,
so I plead with you only this:
We're invisible and hidden
Looking for love - what society has forbidden.
See our pain and dry our tears
Reach out to us and calm our fears."
A contest entry
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550 points, ended August 17, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
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I hate it when peopel try to claime taht kids are making up absue to get attention. It makes me sick. Just supposing the kid WAS making it up, obviously there is a reason they are doing so right? Isn't it worth looking into? I doubt any kid would cry rape because their Daddy sisn't let them have desert oen night or something. Obviously there is SOMETHING going on!
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You did a wonderful job with this. Ususally I try to say to more but at this point in time, on this subject I can say no more. Wonderful job.
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this was a truly emotional peice i can relate to it alot...i know what it's like to just want someone to love you for yew...just wanting to be wanted...accepted...i was abused as a child also and find that ppl treat yew different ly when they know...thnx fro entering and god luck
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fantastic write well done...... g/l
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Welcome to your contest wishing you the best...
Darling
Truth you tear off
as a naked fool
walking bare you scoff
at pointers who drool.
You are not they
while standing for truth
despite what they say
nakedness is your proof.
Smoosh
Janet
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What stood out to me besides the message was the blatant shift from form and rhyme scheme commencing at verse ten. I do understand the need for an understanding heart and two open arms and ears though. So may your quest find fulfillment and your mantle gold.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
ps. Thanks for reading and commenting on my work. I do appreciate it very much.
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What a powerful piece you wrote. I hope it was from something other than your real life. We all deserve attention and understanding from those closest to us. Good job and may you find peace. -
This is such a sad and heartwrenching poem. Your daughter had added such an important part. Thank you both for sharing this.
I'm glad to see that you are allowing your child to see what is darkest in our society. Only by seeing your own actions will she grow to appreciate what hard work it will be to save so many children. God bless you both and Merry Christmas. May your holiday be joyfull and appreciatiative. Love, Patricia
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great work
seems 2 b very very situation oreinted true child abuse and slavery occurrs in many ways for many reason's sex,drugs,money,and just plain abuse unknown 2 me it is truly a sickening situation in are world today the little people are dependant on parents to teach them the way of the world guide them with oh so much care and love nice work of art
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Thanks for your comment. My poem was meant to be situation oriented, because even though it occurs in many different ways, to stop it we need to care about each one individually, because there are many children feeling totally lost and alone in the world. I hope the poem conveys 'true child abuse', but if it doesn't it's the fault of my lack of talent, because it is about true child abuse. Thanks also for your applause. Happy Holidays to you!
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Excellent!
"No one has ever understood
the havoc of my life,
accused of self-creating
all turmoil, guilt and strife."
I could have just as easily written these lines but most specifically the one highlighted above. There is so much sadness in this writ. So very much that I can relate to in being raped, and molested for years until one day I decided to stand-up for myself at a young age of 12. I have always been called, weird, "drama queen", fantasy-girl, you name it...
I held myself responsible for what happened to me for many years. Not until I went into intense therapy did I unearth the TRUTH...I was not responsible for the heinous actions of one who could take advantage of me.
This is perfect for all to heed, and for this challenge. I am so very proud of Janet for always looking at ways to STOP ABUSE!
I am also very encouraged by all the poets who have participated. This is heart-wrenching but so very true. WE ALL NEED TO HELP!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Hi, Rene, I sent you a reply, but for some reason it didn't show up here. I sure hope you got it. And I am glad I was finally able to write this poem. I feel like it freed myself, to be all that is underneath, and this is strange, because I didn't write it for me, but for all the children out there who are still in such terrible situations.
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Hi Duana. Excellent title. A powerful write, message and presentation. Deep expression of emotion. Nice rhyme and flow. Thought provoking. You paint a picture that expresses the intense feelings of abuse with clarity. Well done. Shelley
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Hi. You know, you are right to call these 'the intense feelings of abuse'....somehow the way you phrased this has brought a whole new level of freedom to me. Thank you.
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Beautiful
What a wonderful dedication to those who suffer in silence. lohagh has came up with a good idea with this contest. This entry is a very impressive one indeed. Good work my fellow poet. ~PeacE~GarY~
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heartwrenching
As you say not metered verse, but I find it very well thought out. You really do tell your story. However you percieve this tragedy, you can express feelings and envoke them in others. I sat here crying for the lost innocence of this strangled soul. Reach out and you find not the kindness and compassion you so deserve. Give me your hand, I will help. You touched a very deep part of my soul. Thank you for making me feel not so alone. You have a gift for finding words to chill the soul of your reader. Very well done.
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Every word... every stanza... it's like what I'm in now... I thought I was alone in the world... Having to feel like sh*t this holiday... How could we go on pretending nothings wrong... Letting people cut us deeper, blind us further, silence our fears and erase our dreams... I want to quit so badly... but I'm not like them... I care...
Earlier, i asked one of my friends to tell me that everything would be better...
How can simple words can be so hard to be heard...
Thanks for the awesome read... Although it was long, I heard every word...
~JP
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Hi thanks for your comment. I don't know anything about you or your life, but I do know that you are not lone, even if other people, and life makes you want to feel like you are. I also know, that things will get better, cause I've been through all the feelings you talk about in your comment, and things do get better. It's great to meet another person who has a heart, and understanding!
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Intense
The rhyme is good and carries the message and makes the piece flow well. Somespelling errors could be corrected because they take attention away from your important words as the reading goes, but this is an awesome emotional outpouring and you have expressed this so well and presented a true piece of art here. Best of luck.
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I am lousy with remembering to check the details, but I'm getting better. Thanks for pointing out that there are spelling errors. I will fix them asap (I guess that's what ap is for). Thanks again, and happy holidays to you!
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This is an interesting piece. If only everyone would stop and open their eyes to see what is really happening. We are all different, unique, and special in our own way. I really enjoyed reading this. I love the background that you chose here. Great work and thanks for sharing it!
Jeremy0826 -
You won't be one with your vision unless you close your eyes for a while - and try tokeep silent
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Very thoughtful critque of my title and poem. Your perception is the other side of mine, and they compliment each other: each in it's right moment.
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Wow blown away by this and the strength in your words, even the background sums it up 'Don't close your eyes' we need to see that everything is NOT right with the world and we must all fight the injustices. Iohagh will be impressed.
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