I know it may be early
You may not think it true
You will understand me, surly
I think I might just love you
I don't know how you will react
if you'll throw me out
or keep me near
Trying to keep my heart intact
But my feelings for you are clear
And if you do not feel the same for me
I will still love you
I don't have a doubt
Just tell me what your feeling
Tell me your soul
I find it so appealing
My heart you stole
Author notes
It can be so hard to tell the person you really love how you feel about them.
A contest entry
- ~~Show me true love~~ by RudolfTamer.
420 points, ended January 8, 2007, 60 entries
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353 points, ended January 14, 2007, 11 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Appealing love:
In other currently running contests:
Creativity: 4/10
Concept: 4/10
Language: 4/10
Overall Effect: 4/10
Final Grading: 16/40
Notes: needs to be careful with language.
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Are you sure that surly is the word you are looking for? There is surely which means: "2. Without fail: definitely or unavoidably." whereas, surly is: "bad-tempered: bad-tempered, unfriendly, rude, and somewhat threatening." I surely hope your love is not unfriendly.
One of your I’s isn’t capitalized. Not a bad thing, just thought I’d tell you incase you wanted it capital. Typos are rather annoying, no?
Over all this is pretty decent, but it doesn’t give me anything to "see," if you know what I mean.
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good
I really like this, it flows really well and I like that everyone can relate. good luck -
cool i really like this it is really good. smooth rythem that flows off the tounge! great write! thanks for the read
~inlove indeath~
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