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Slender fingers gently slid through hairs on my pounding chest,
As passion’s Afterglow lingered on leaving feelings truly blessed.
Shining beads still remained, glistening in the moon’s soft light,
From deep emotions and making love during the departed night.
Time to savour the present moment, for speech was not required,
Myriad feelings tingled vividly intense, as I lay there fully inspired.
Time when beauty blossoms best and peace is the main emotion,
As heavenly angels softly sung and Love stirred its secret potion,
I gladly gazed at my lover’s face, so serene with a peaceful smile,
Satisfied and enjoying the moment, as she stroked me for a while.
For Afterglow is sacred and should be savoured while it abounds,
It is the opposite of preceding passions and eager ardent sounds.
A time to recall an adventure which two lovers have jointly made,
Now time to write it to memory of the parts that both have played.
For these will remain in your enduring book of life for ever more,
Wondrous times to recall on troubled days or if you’re feeling poor.
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this is exquisit i really loved this, it told of the true feelings. very good
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wow
this is filled with so much love... great write
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"Time to savour the present moment, for speech was not required,"
I love that line. Your imagery of both image and emotion adds true beauty to this tender write.
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this is wonderful poemgood luck
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I stand and applaud you!
Ok so as I sit here blushing.....
I notice your looking at me( your picture), and I turned even more red...
Ok so I absolutely love the way you have with words!
Time to savour the present moment, for speech was not required,
Myriad feelings tingled vividly intense, as I lay there fully inspired.
Time when beauty blossoms best and peace is the main emotion,
As heavenly angels softly sung and Love stirred its secret potion,
I gladly gazed at my lover’s face, so serene with a peaceful smile,
Satisfied and enjoying the moment, as she stroked me for a while.
For Afterglow is sacred and should be savored while it abounds,
It is the opposite of preceding passions and eager ardent sounds.
I am nominating this for front page my friend!
Your awesome!
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Well i liked this poem i liked what you say and the way it was said, i share the sentiment and how you have expressed it. A vivid touching moment.
Thanks for sharing it.
regards
Perdix
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'Afterglow.'...
'Time when beauty blossoms best and peace is the main emotion,
As heavenly angels softly sung and Love stirred its secret potion,'...these lines I enjoyed the most...
and thank you for the read/write....
as always...
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A wonderful write Bazza!
You make the reader easily captivated by your words. The picture you paint is an abstract that everyone sees differently. Great job!
Keep penning!
Riche
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Transcend All
Groovy Writing...I enjoyed the imagery of your experience. Thank you for sharing!
Namaste'
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Excellent
Barry
This was so beautiful it has rendered me speechless and you know that rarely if ever happens but this oh my word really captured my heart...It let the mind wonder not only to the present picture but also what transpired earlier...
You let the reader create their own story and that is a wonderful way to write
Thank you so much for sharing
Love ya
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Beautiful and breathtaking. This expresses love in such a tender and romantic way. It is all at once sensual without being erotic. I really enjoyed reading this. It seems to lend a feeling of serene calmness. Well done.
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nicee.
I think the flow was okay, since everyone seems to comment it. Imagery is a great tool to utilize. Overall I liked it, especially the passion in it. good write.
-Melissa AkA MiMi
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I too would like to bask in the afterglow, you stir the emotions in this of love so softly given. Love, C
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A time to recall an adventure which two lovers have jointly made,
Now time to write it to memory of the parts that both have played.
^ my favorite lines.
I love them. I agree that the flow is a BIT off, but otherwise, this poem is great. ♥ Erin -
flow is a bit off. I love the seventh line..."beauty blossoms best".
I think that each line could be split, and it would make the poem flow better, but it's up to you. Either way, it works.
its a beautiful, and passionate poem, thanks for the write, and good luck!
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TRY this first
Just thought I would point out that my 'picture poems' are meant to be listened to (mainly an audience) but NOT performed and you will see that if it is read at a slow deliberate speed, the pictures will form in your mind like a movie. Try it and you will find the flow much better.
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hmmm....
I still believe the flow is off, but when I read it as slow as I can handle(I'm naturally a speed-reader) the flow is better.
I still love the poem, and thanks for the write.
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wow, b-e-a-u-itful!
Sir,
I love passionate-romantic poetry! She is one lucky lady; if you love her a tenth as well as you write, then... i am speachless... i always try to write like this... great poem... it tell a sexual (passionate) topic in a PG13 way! I too applaud your poem for a job well done!!! -
well your use of metre separates this approach to the 'afterglow' from my poem of the same name (no shameless self promoting again!!);I thought it was harmonious and pleasing, without being overly original, but it is difficult in rhyme scheme poetry, becuase you have to consider obviously the frame and the particualar words; the restrictions are there, but when done right it is always a fantastic lyrical lilt to the poem achieved....well done sir, I applaud. Kind regards - Col.
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I find your work emotionally touching for me. I understand your feelings, because I have felt them. You write them perfectly.
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honest...pure expression from a guileless ,open,sensitive,lover of life...
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It is those tender and gentle moments that define a life well lived. This gently flowing poem reveals the heart of someone who appreciates not only the passion but its power in the quiet moments.
Bravo!
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Oooh this reminds me of my poem called Glow, except this is the longer version. Such a vivid poem... I am honored to read this beautiful write! Good job here, I hope you keep writing with your wonderful talents!! ~ Kerri
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The afterglow is the most special time of all, the time when you really know the other cares. Comtemplations such as this is what makes life's moments worth living. You have expressed yourself tenderly sweet within this poem. I enjoyed it and its tender flavor.
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This is one of the sweetest expressions of tenderness I have yet seen. Leaves one feeling content...you really have a way of bringing the reader into that moment!
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You must have a wonderful character and personality with a great outlook on life by the words you use and it is a growing satisfaction to have you read my work. There are many other poems (around 120 odd) many of which I believe will appeal to you. Thanks for your wonderful support
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Such a beautiful afterglow this work gives out to the reader, it has a very calming feel to it and made me feel like I was laid in the sun beside a quiet little stream somewhere just pondering. This is truly a fine piece of written art. Excellent penning.
Shaz xx
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Shaz, at the risk of being crude, I must ask if your comment was risque on purpose or an oversite (Afterglow) Stating that it made you feel like you had been laid beside a stream brought resounding laughter from deep within, but I am certain it was a mistake on your part as I could not imagine you saying what I thought you meant. lol that really cracks me up !!!!
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Beautiful and tender write my dear friend!!!!!!!!!
Barry, This was such a beautiful poem to read as I came on this morning. I felt ever word you wrote and what you meant. You are a wise man and all you have told me about holding onto memories with happiness and smiles, not tears is so true. I never want to forget the good memories. They are beautiful. They make me glow inside now instead of outside. You are a dear sweet friend. God will have a special place for you and me. We will be sent to the Hopeless Romatic's cloud.
It feels good to smile when I remember things not cry. God Bless you. You are such a dear friend. Thank you for everything. Love, Sandy
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hi my lovely daddy
A nice romantic poem.
btw...our new year doesn't begin in Christmass here, of course we have some Christians here too who celebrate it, but our new year begins in the first day of Spring.
Love you
Wish you wonderful happy days.
Shahrzad
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Bazza you have truly captured the finest part of love.
Not the physical side but the one that says when laying there This really is what complete contentment feels like.Like any craftsman to stand back and feel a job well done.Excellent
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Beautiful!
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Enrapturedly Lovely
The afterglow, causes me a contented sighing. Caressing embraces and loving looks are the balance to the equation. This is fantastic. Thanks so mmuch for sharing this with us. We are more enlightened and brightened because of you and your words.
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Wonderful comment
I am so pleased you liked it because it seems too many people miss the best part through impatience or something else, (what could it be ??) and I must admit have never seen this side of the equation very often if at all, written about. Plenty about the physical side but .... well, I know there are other sides ...
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