Everyones looking at me
as they serve up the tea
waiting for me to bite
i fear that i might
i can't explain myself
it's like i'm scare,
of it in my mouth,
i chew but spit it out.
I'm angry at them all,
and all i want to do,
is scream at them,
and run to my room,
i throw my plate to the floor,
and scream 'stop looking at me'
They all stare in shock as i stand
broken glass landing on the ground
then they turn round in dismay and say,
'why won't you eat?'
'you wouldn't understand, beacuse i don't, just leave me alone'
I run to my room,
and i begin to cry,
i'm hurting my family,
and i can't explain why,
i look at myself in the mirror,
and all that i see,
is a mass of tears,
drowning me.
How will i ever keep up
with all the girls in my school,
there all perfectly petit,
and i'm not like them at all,
and all i want, is for people,
to stop looking at me.
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Amen to this one! Although I love your poem, I do wish that you didin't have the experiences to know how to write it...
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Very good job.
Um, there are some grammar mistakes. One thing you need to remember is to capitalize your "I"s- as I like to think of it, never belittle yourself! Also, you may want to use more periods rather than so many commas just to break things up and make them easier to read.
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good poem but some of they rhyme seemed a little bit forced if it was purposefull
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this is a beautiful poem and i can relate to it. i want people to stop looking at me too especially when i eat. this is sad and i hope you get better. great poem and keep writing
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hmmmm i think you really got the idea and the feeling out really well... i must say near the middle with the dialogue it gets a little rough simply because it tosses up the rhythm a bit, but you get back on track. good luck
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