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An Evening Stroll




Footfalls echo with a hollow thunder

under an unnatural dampening, oppressive hush
I thrill to a perverse obsession;

an intrinsic demonic taint.
 

A child shudders, sleeping in his house
as I walk by outside.
 
My low chuckle illicites dreamers'

screams, as it locks them in a loop of

a nightmarish climactic moment

in the fun and games of the

psychopath to whom thier sleep

has offered them up to,

rendering them victimized.
 
I stroll to the percussive strain
of my satisfyingly hellish internal

orchestra. Keeping time with

glistening wet femurs and

scapulas, playing the xylophone

on unsedated exposed spines.
 
I breath deeply and open my mouth

flicking my tongue out to taste the air.

Testing for opportunities for amusing

entertainments in vulnerabilities I sense there.
 

I pause as I pass an alley, from which
rises the acrid scent, of a bladder lost

control of as nearer to there I went.

A strangely potent pulse of light

surrounds a mound of rags

peering at me with vagabond eyes.
 

Lovely.

A sensitive, too weak to handle

the assault of feeling the pain

of so many wasted lives.
 
I revel in the shame even more
than the terror, of the holder

of unrealized, wasted potential;
whom I approach with measured deliberation.
 
Aware that my smile has stretched impossibly,

spanning from ear to ear; displaying three

elegant rows of shark-like serrated teeth.
Static begins to crackle my cloak, and lift

my hair up to writh in a perverse nimbus

around my head. My black, pupiless unfathomable

eyes begin to dance with flares of red and flame-like

sparks of light. 
   
      
I dip into the wasted mind and rummage to see

what goodies I might find. Aha! A wife and two

little kidletts left, the faithless father thought,
mercifully, behind.
 

I capture his psyche as he silently screams,

and take him along for the ride. Into the dreams

of a tender little muffet of six years or maybe five.

Once firmly ensconced I provide her with

inspiration, of my own patented sort.
 

The wastrel father watches helpless

as she rises to revel in it and cavort.

Fraticide the appetizer, Matricide the main course.
Both served with a vivid side of gore.
   

Followed by a tasty spectical of a flambe suicide.

Ah what a fortunate and entertaining opportunity
I had happened upon with which to make sport.

The telepathy which had driven him outside the

boundaries of his life, made the ravaged experiences

of daughter, son and wife a particular delight.

The impotent would-be savior lives hell's eternity,
trifold upon the cessation of the heartbeats that
punctuated the only happiness in his life.

As I returned his essence to his fragmented mind

and contemplated the manner of his demise;
   

I realize how much more satisfying
his torment would be...left alive.

Trauma-induced hysteria an entertaining additive

to the dementia in his newly brewed head stew.

I left him there to wallow in it as I turned away

steeped in my alluring Demon glam.
 
Flattered as I hear him clearly thinking I am
the Anti-Christ. Completely ignorant of the fact
that Angels and Demons are of the same species;
seperated only by race.
 
 

Such a lovely night for a stroll in this section

of the Fallen Garden that had been, to me,
assigned. I went about my merry way,

alert for whatever possible passtimes that

might arise.

Author notes

D.r.e.a.m.c.a.t.c.h.e.r.


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  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    February 10, 2007

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    I really enjoyed the pic at the top of the poem. The eyes are really wicked cool and freaky. You did a really good job with your poem as well. You created a very vivid image with your words. The backround is very nice as well. You are very talented keep up the great work. Thank you for entering our contest and good luck.

    ~Chrissy~

  • phoenixonfire
    January 15, 2007
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    AWESOME!!!

    i must say the imagery and the creativity u have shown through this poem is unspeakable!! The word usage , the flow of thought n da way they have been linked together is awesome! Thanks for entering and good luck!!!
    preets


  • sewasham gold member
    January 12, 2007
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    Nice job on this. It creates some really dark images. The atmosphere of the whole write creates a very ominous feeling. Maintaining that dark feeling throughout a piece this long takes talent. Kudos on a well done piece. Take care and Have fun. Steve


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    January 4, 2007

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    horrifying~

    You got this penned down to a tee...
    Reminds me of the books that I sometimes read...
    The imagery in this alone is just incredible...
    And the paragraph before the ends I think sums it up the best...thinking they are the Anti-Christ ignorance of the fact..that Angels and Demons are in the same species just separated by race...
    This has got to be a winner in my book..will be looking over my shoulder the rest of the night now
    Best of luck in the contest...this truly deserves the gold...
    Love n hugs
    Susan~~~


  • TommyTRASH
    January 3, 2007

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    Wow!

    Wow! Very macabre but very well written and very descriptive! This is utterly and totally amazing!
    My favorite part is this:

    "A child shudders, sleeping in his house
    as I walk by outside.

    My low chuckle illicites dreamers'
    screams, as it locks them in a loop of
    a nightmarish climactic moment
    in the fun and games of the
    psychopath to whom thier sleep
    has offered them up to,
    rendering them victimized"

    I really like how this creature can affect anyone no matter what state of mind they're in.

    Great stuff! Good Luck

    Shady Lane


  • AshtrayBaby
    December 26, 2006

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    Christ, this is gorgeous.

    "Trauma-induced hysteria an entertaining additive
    to the dementia in his newly brewed head stew.
    I left him there to wallow in it as I turned away
    steeped in my alluring Demon glam"

    Probably one of the best I've seen in this contest. My ONLY complaint is, you should be happy that I only have one, that it's so long that during the middle I started daydreaming thinking about trivial stuff and then I snapped back and I was like "oh I'm reading a poem". So yeah. Maybe that's just me or maybe it's too long. I dunno but it's still really good. Despite the length. Good luck in the contest!


  • Girl Mad As Birds
    December 23, 2006

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    Great imagery in that piece, I could visualize it happening. It was long but it definately kept my attention throughout the whole poem. Beautiful work.


  • Violent Serenity
    December 22, 2006
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    woah, long but very good, thank you for your entry!!! good luck in the contest!
    ^+_+^ Cado


  • cherche -d -ame
    December 22, 2006

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    hmmmmmmm.........quite deep in its own disturbing way. In the background here the phantom of the opera is playing (the music of the night) and it was a very condusive sound to this write. Of course I have no idea if this has any personal identity to it....however in the beginning I was thinking of an emergency response team....at the end I saw a police officer walk his beat and try to clear his head. Anyway...........it is sort of hard to think of wishing someone a happy holiday (knowing that life on the street does not break for any day or season)
    all my best,
    reenie


  • JohnnyD gold member
    December 22, 2006

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    flambe suicide

    God, hadn't thought of Flambe Suicide in years! Where did you know her from? She was that hot waitress at Dennys in Nuevo Laredo I used to date in the 70s. yeah, Falambe was a great chick, of course she was shadow side up with a side of insanity and some toasted brains with suicide gravy but Jesus, could she dance! Like she had ball bearings in her hips! Not that "I" would ever notice of course.



    JD p.s, nice write Diana, feel like Hermosillo this weekend?

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