Arcadia
Of all the Earthly places,
which would relate most closely,
to arcadia?
A white lake,
suspended in frozen repose,
snowfall lacking celerity,
the moon full in the night’s sky,
reflecting upon the sub-zero water,
with stars perforating the sheet of ice,
breath mirroring the scene.
Atop a large hill,
while the sun quits the day,
from behind the hills
to paint the heavens,
the birds fluttering around treetops,
chirping a splendid melody,
and a warm breeze blows
the aroma of flowers along.
Amidst an effervescent plain,
where laughter abounds,
beautiful animals gallop and play,
the grass grows great in height,
bringing fields of daffodils to life,
years of chaste kept in check
for the sun keeps eternal watch.
Before a deep valley,
where within a grand river roars,
weaving a maze of cliffs and falls,
the roar of the rapids reach the apex,
the cliffs of rock change shades of color,
igniting a fiery rainbow as the sun raises high!
Along a sanded beach,
the waves ebb and flow,
to pull down the sandcastles along the shore,
and fill the moats subtly placed,
the sand so soft and lukewarm,
the metronome of the tide’s fall,
of the sun’s rise or descent,
which splatters the beach with dye.
Within a wood,
so remote from industrial life,
where the animals sing a never-ending symphony,
rapt with joy and tranquil sinuous time,
the leaves would dye orange and red,
to weave a blanket on the forest floor,
and warm it from around winter’s nigh,
where the air is fresh and crisp of pine.
Or…
Perhaps arcadia is within ourselves.
Deep in our hearts and bound of lethe,
taking our home, our family, and friends,
as a paradise captured within our minds!
Swim this river of Hades,
but drink not its wine,
to uncover the arcadia hidden so well.
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Critique.
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Beautiful
Thank you for entering my contest!--Sahlili20 -
wwo, this sounds like a gorgous place! Simply breathtaking was your poem, and the place you so vividly painted with your words! Thanks for entering this into my contest!
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this was good. and really unique. i loved your description of this place. it was so thought out,that i didn't even have to close my eyes in order to be put in this land. i was already there just reading this piece. it was rich in imagination,and the ending had to be my most favourite part out of it all. so it was a very well written poem on your part. thank you for entering,and good luck.
*autumn* -
Nice work. The reader really takes the journey with you. Great work and good luck in my contest.
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I long to see your arcadia for it is a stunning vision, would that it would appear for all to see and visit. Was a lovely journey to take through your words.
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Thanks for taking me on a incredible journey through the arcadia with your vision of words. This is great!
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Everything before the "or" with awe...
Darling
You wove a tapestry
beautiful like Hollywood films
full of splendid majesty
even branches for kilns.
Then with you "or"
perhaps your constructions doubt
disbelieving your fabric tore
your fantasies turned about.
Smoosh
Janet
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