well, it's time to go...
well, it's time to go...
Author notes
"--Heaven balanced on a grassblade." - Allen Ginsberg.
Poem that inspired this- 'Wales Visitation', Allen Ginsberg (obviously). Good poem. Long poem.
A contest entry
- : Read a Poem, Write a Poem . . . - by zara.
1000 points, ended January 6, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Another plead for title help. I'm hopeless.
Comments
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I enjoy poems such as this, that personify the poem. The idea of one tiptoeing along a blade of grass is intriging, makes me think of Leprechauns, which fits, really, since they’re such flighty, tricky little beings. So I hear. Also intriguing is the idea that you were inspired by Ginsberg, who surely isn’t known for such concise, imagist poetry. BUT I read recently that he greatly admired WC Williams, so there ya go. Full circle.
Nicely done. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I have been annotating A Christmas Carol this week in preparation to teach it next year and your reference to fog and weather/nature reminds me of Dickens' reference to it as a view of the main character. Well done to you to encapsulate such an aura within a contacted piece of writing. Thanks. Anthony.
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barf! barf!
wagoftail
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LOL With out that tail wagging, I would of thought you were upchucking on my poem.
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The title matches the poem pretty well. But I will think about it and come back if something else comes to mine. Titles are sometime the hardest part of a poem. The refinement in this one is really good though, and you should feel proud of that.
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Beautifully Written
Such terrific imagery just awesome! You have definitely convinced me to read Ginsberg. Fantastic!!!
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This is Very beautiful and i could see it all as i read it. It was short but very clear. My faviort lines where "glistened the world
from the tip of its little nose" I could see it like dew drops. Very well written.
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eh, didn't have time to comment this morning, but I came back like a good girl.
this is lovely, very stunning imagery and thats saying alot 'cause its a rare nature poem that catches me.
as for your hopeless-ness for titles, your on your own there, i always have pitiful titles. x -shirley-
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Thank you.
LOL It's a rare day that I write a nature poem. Bleh. I'm normally more interested in human nature than trees and grass and pretty white flowers...
but what the heck. One has to come out of their comfort zone occasionally.
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eh thats true I guess, but I'll probably fight it till my last breath.
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Great
i have to chase those pesky poems out of my yard, too. even now, after i had stopped feeding them. but, like they say, once you feed 'em, they never go away.
loved the title, too. down here, every fall and winter fog banks fill the valleys till the sun gets high enough...like fallen clouds among the trees. it was like that this morning out back, and was the first thing i thought of when i saw the title of your poem.
most cool.
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I am just such a fan of your writing. This is absolutely beautiful. So vivid, and what a brilliant metaphor.
A great way to start the day.
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stunning-- it feels.. idk. i'll shut up and go away
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