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In The Midst Of The Storm

Anger, hatred, passion
Jealousy, revenge, devotion
Three million people around
Feeling every other one

 

Anger, out of control

Boom - something happens

 

Silent tears being heard

No one else saw the crying

Except

Ones who embraced them

 

 

World events -
Earthquakes, floods
Seeing them play
Over and over
So close -
Yet so far away

 

Babies screaming loudly
Needing to be fed
The cries of the unwanted
Feeling them
Bones shattering
Breaking, ripping in two

 

Falling on my knees
Weeping from events around

 

Screaming inside -
“What can I do?”

 

Silence

 

A soft, still voice answers...

 

" Just Be There For Them "

Author notes

It's Kari n this marks my 100th poem.

A contest entry

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  • FifthDove
    April 1, 2008

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    I see you entered your 100th poem, good girl you know I love the poem already so all thats left to say is thank you for the entry and I wish you the best in the group contest


  • FifthDove
    April 1, 2008
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    This is the 100th poem... Nice work BTW too


  • earthstar
    June 20, 2007

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    This write has stayed with me. Just be there for them is a very powerful statement. I first read a write let it burn into me. Then I reread it again and again. To let the words enfold me. This one has stuck with me. I truly like the imagery you portrayed in this write. I think you have done a great deal of reflection about today society. I like the end it truly leaves an impact with the reader. It left and impact with me for many day. This is brilliant write.


  • NotAMolly
    June 6, 2007

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    This was intresting. you fit alot of world topics into one poem! It is overwhelming, the sadness that is going on all around us. And all we can do is be there for them the best we can, even if it is only in our thoughts and hearts and prayers.


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    June 5, 2007

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    Wonderfully and awesomely done, Kari; I think this is a fine sharing!
    Thank you very much for sharing


  • Lady-Pegasus
    May 24, 2007

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    Thank you for your contest submission as well as for following the rules. WOW! such angst to be brought to it's own knees by a sort simple phrase, amazing, my friend this is awesome! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e

  • CoffeeGrounds
    April 14, 2007

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    Such haertfelt tenderness is a blessing in these curel materialistic age. I hope you keep writing to raise awareness fore the little ones and the under dogs


  • Heavens Child
    March 19, 2007

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    Wow!

    This is exactly what I'm looking for. Very strong, powerful message. I love the conclusion you come to in the last line. Thank you for entering my contest.


  • ObliviousReality
    March 18, 2007

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    Passing through...Wow. Very nice. Loved the title, really complimented the poem. Had a nice form. Discriptive too. And made a good point. I wonder about what to do sometimes, and all I can do is "Just be there for them". Excellent poem, good job!


  • Kevin Moderators member
    February 5, 2007
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    a passionate voice, thanks for your entry!


  • Justified Inc.
    February 4, 2007

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    Whew! Powerful!

    This was a fantastic read! Yes, I can relate to it in a big way. Like, when I watch the news and cry....read the paper and cry.................look around me, and cry..............I love the ending it is profound!
    Nice job!
    castaway


  • Hanabi Hyuuga
    February 3, 2007
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    that was nice


  • Arsenic-
    January 30, 2007

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    ahhhh... just be there for them. how true! That was great. That's the thing about teens in particular, you have to win the right to be heard, and you do that by just being there. Very good poem.


  • GuardianPhoenix7289
    January 30, 2007

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    Oh my...

    This is one of those poems, that puts me in a state of just not knowing what to say! I am utterly amazed!!! Your usage of all of those adjectives was just superb! Great job!!!


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 27, 2007

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    Intuition is a great thing, as is empathy. But it is not always roses and candy when dealing with knowing what others feel. If only the world could reach out and feel each other, it would be a much more peaceful place. Because they would KNOW the pain they cause. Excellent write here Kari.


  • My Nemesis
    January 26, 2007

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    Wow. This is a very good poem. It deals with so much pain - the pain of any/all catastrophes. We all feel helpless, and we all feel the hopelessness of the situation. But we can all do something - even if it is just being there in some way - with prayer, donations, or physically. The ending is powerful. Well done.


  • me steve
    January 22, 2007

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    Why did I not read this before

    Going through one of those horrid events yep that voice is so soft yet so assuring and has so much meaning I agree. I noticed that this was for a teen project if you are a teenager to have thoughts such as this running around in you then my dear friend you will be used very wisely by the GOD of all GODS Christ JESUS. Very well written and thank you for your comment on my mere bit of writing skills.


    • Kari gold member
      January 22, 2007
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      I'm not a teenager but a lot of the teens are drawn to me


  • Danna Hobart
    January 20, 2007

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    I like your message in this poem, but I wonder if you can say it with a little more imagery? The reason that writers are supposed to show rather than tell is showing creates mental pictures for the reader, it forces the reader to become involved in the poem.

    So, my suggestion would be to find the image for the nouns you have listed in the first stanza. For example:

    Anger clenched in fists,
    hatred shouts through the streets,
    passion stretches and grasps for reciprication,

    You can do better than that, but it is just an example of how to work in a little more imagery.

    World events -
    Earthquakes, floods
    Seeing them play
    Over and over
    ... I like the Biblical allusion you have here. I wonder if you can carry the allusion even farther within the poem? This comes from Jesus' sermon on the Mount,(Matthew 24) and there are a lot of other signs he listed in it. Maybe you could work them into it.

    So close,
    Yet so far away... these lines are cliche. I understand what you are trying to say with them, that in this computer age, things seem so close, even though they are on the other side of the world, and they still affect us- but can you say it in a fresher way?

    • Kari gold member
      January 20, 2007
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      Hmmm I am going to sleep on it tonight and think about your ideas. I will IM you if I make any changes..if I do it right now it might not be so good


  • suseann
    January 19, 2007

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    Awh! I feel this too.Watching the repeated bombardment on news over and over may not be such a good thing for us.Makes us think,but too much and too close to a situation. And we lose our objectivity. Then it's imposible to find solutions that can help.A strong gripping piece.~~Suseann


  • rbrmmttjm
    January 18, 2007
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    this was great, i liked i


  • pumpernickle
    January 14, 2007

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    Wow i wish i could write as fantastic as this.
    It looks so simple, but i could probably never do it.
    Great job!


  • Isabel Cult
    January 14, 2007
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    Thanks for the comments! This is a very emotive piece. Great work!


  • MessedupMarionette
    January 14, 2007

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    This is a really great poem! I can't think of anything to critique about it. It's just straight up great. Good luck in the contest!


  • Sagergirl
    January 13, 2007
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    Extremely wonderful!! I really loved this poem you wrote. It shows such helplessness with everything that goes on in the world, and yet at the last moment a string of hope arrives by knowing that you just need to do your part to help make things better. Great message. Awesome job!!


  • Gods child40 silver member
    January 12, 2007
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    excellent

    great job!!


  • debilynn gold member
    January 10, 2007

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    WOW

    this is great! i like your style. you have a lot of insight of life. the emotions this brings out are many. this has smooth flow and is easy to read and comprehend. you did a wonderful write! you are very talented. keep the ink flowing poet. God bless you


  • bleedingxheart
    January 9, 2007
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    your poem is amazing its beautiful i loves it


  • wings of an angel
    January 9, 2007
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    nice poem Kari


  • forsaken2lovex
    January 9, 2007

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    Your and amazing writer
    You have great emotion though out your writing
    This is one of the truest poems i read to far.


  • Bedroom Eyes
    January 9, 2007

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    There is a very powerful message here, and it's one that many need to see.
    "Just Be There For Them"
    Those few words speak volumes. Well done Kari


  • Angel With No Halo
    January 8, 2007
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    This is really good. It has much inspiration and I felt the pain in yur heart. A great write about society and Yes.. so sad that many people gp hungry every day.. more.. dying from starvation. You really hit me with this one.. Thank you for that!!

    ~Krys~


  • Lady-Pegasus
    January 6, 2007
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    very good

    I love the ending, sort of bringing it all together in a soft quiet answer


  • DeadHorror
    January 5, 2007
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    Awesome

    This really good


  • Chrysalis
    January 5, 2007

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    A great poem with a truly great meaning. The silence could mean nothing... but when it spoke louldy to be heard... "just be there for them" -inspiring indeed.-


  • Sandygram
    January 5, 2007

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    A BEAUTIFUL POEM!!!!

    You are as wonderful writer. This poem was very heartfelt and so full of emotion.I love these lines. I can really relate to them.

    Silent tears being heard
    No one else saw the crying
    Except
    Ones who embraced them

    This was such a pleasure to read. You take care, Sandy


  • noir eyes
    January 5, 2007
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    wow...this one is just amazing. just...wowww.


  • JazzALTernative silver member
    January 4, 2007
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    Beautifully written with inner voice calling for healing.


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    January 2, 2007
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    Powerful

    Written with so much emotion...Good job.


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    December 31, 2006

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    thought provoking and truthful

    "Just be there for them," yes, that is something important to do. Thank you for that thought, because it is encouraging. This is a lesson on facing the negatives with a hopeful heart.

    Well written. Great imagery and very appropriate vocabulary.

    Like I write in my own poems [admission ] , there are probably a few words not needed which would make the poem more succinct. But, that is a a matter of opinion.

    e.g. 'Anger spins out of control," would have the same meaning if it were 'Anger, out of control." Leave out the word "down"

    I would put a comma between 'soft' and 'still.' but that is my grammar talking!! Some poets do not like it.

    Very well done. I like it a lot.



    Richard


    • Kari gold member
      December 31, 2006
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      I don't mind at all. I did correct those and I appreciate you taking time to respond!


  • catz Moderators member
    December 31, 2006

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    I'm pretty sure I read this before but I don't see my comment so maybe not.. so here's one for you

    You've written a whirlwind poem, so expressive of the way things are. I can feel the compassion and plea for understanding and help within the lines of this poem,

    "Just be there for them" what a powerful finish to a powerful piece.

    Good luck in the contest

    Happy New Year, hon
    love and
    Granna

  • Eusebius
    December 31, 2006
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    bravo

    Like a snap shot and very abbreviated look at the chaotic reality of the world. bravo


  • freespirit51
    December 31, 2006

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    This was a great work. You show many feelings and emotions with your words.

    Silent tears being heard
    No one else saw the crying
    Except
    Ones who embraced them

    These are very powerful words to starrt off with. And I have seen and heard these quite often. Great work my friend and good luck in the contest.


  • rollingzen
    December 22, 2006
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    sensitive,compassionate..speaking for all of us that endure the madness of life


  • SurelyWritten
    December 21, 2006

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    I heard a rumor that you were a fantastic writer, its the first rumor I've ever heard thats completely true!

    Wow I am so grateful to you for writing this, honeslty society just needs a wake-up call. This poem is potent strong and truthful, and you did a marvelous job of penning it.

    I wish you the best and good luck in the contest,

    -shirley-


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 21, 2006
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    in the midst of a strom is where we tend to fall, the pressure of the wind and the fury of the rain overcome us, it is forever best when someone comes to help us. this is a wonderful poem you have write here, i loved reading it, you have a golden pen, good luck in the contest

  • suseann
    December 21, 2006
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    Truth bares witness to this gift as mentioned in this passionate write's words, being the most remarkable of kindnesses recalled over time.But the basic needed material items do come in a close second to this.~~Suseann A heart's labor imprinted in this fine write.


  • P0TE is Dead
    December 21, 2006

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    This is amazing. I love how all of the things you tried to express came off of the page and into my mind like a movie being played on my own personal screen.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 21, 2006

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    I love this piece... So full of emotion, understanding and passion. Such sadness that hits you deep and I totally and utterly can relate... Good luck in the contest and well written my friend <3


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    December 21, 2006
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    Most EXCELLENT write, my friend....EXCELLENT

  • Eusebius
    December 21, 2006

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    bravo

    Certainly an all encompassing poem--wars and rumors of wars--nicely and very deftly done poem with great emotion. bravo! bravo!

  • Suzanne Dia
    December 21, 2006

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    The best thing you can do is be there when needed. I've learned over the years that sometimes people push you away. Sometimes you cannot comfort them, but the knowledge that you would if you could is sometimes enough.




  • Ami amour
    December 21, 2006

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    wow

    You have taken me on a rollercoaster of pain from the top the words give you a stumbling effect and then "silence"
    A soft still voice answers...
    " Just Be There For Them
    This is a stunning ending but in all of this happening to all around the world there is often no-one, Just "Silence"
    Good work and keep your pen flowing.
    Ami


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    December 21, 2006

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    what an amazing piece this is, and it is so very true. it is so easy for many to be more giving, to show much concern, to reach out a hand. yet many turn away as if they can't see, i love this poem because i know that there are so much more giving people out there then not, we all just need to take that first step. and see just where it leads us. if one person did just one good deed and the next person did just one good deed and so on and so on. just think how wonderful this world would be.. i am ready to lend a hand, who is going to follow me, is the question.
    you have done an excellent job on this perfect piece of poetry.

    joyce

    • Kari gold member
      December 21, 2006
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful and kind comment. You did a great job in summing up things with your comment as well Thank you joyce. I appreciate it !!


  • Crimson Lotus
    December 21, 2006

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    Awwww, this poem is so sad, yet inspiring at the same time. I loved this
    "Screaming inside -
    “What can I do?”



    Silence



    A soft still voice answers...



    " Just Be There For Them " "
    So touching.


    • Kari gold member
      December 21, 2006
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      Thank you hun I am so glad you liked it


  • SithHappens
    December 21, 2006

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    Hmmm... I believe it might be "Over and over" in line 14 and "Needing to be fed" in line 18... however I could be wrong


    • Kari gold member
      December 21, 2006
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      Yulp you're right hehe thank you so much huney I did correct them


  • Arcularis
    December 21, 2006

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    GREAT POEM NOT KIDDING

    this is an AWESOME poem for sure. i can understand where you are coming from with this..it's like it spoke to me. technically i'm still a teen, so yeah. it does work for this contest. thanks for allowing me to read and comment on this poem.


    • Kari gold member
      December 21, 2006
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      You're welcome hun and I am so glad you liked it


  • Miss Sweet Kisses
    December 21, 2006

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    WOWW!!!

    Ahhhhhhhhhhh this is soooooooooooooooooo amazing! Such a powerful write on society! Thanx for sharing Sissy!
    xoxoxoxoxxoxoxoxxxo`z!


    • Kari gold member
      December 21, 2006

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      Thank you so much huney!! I am glad you liked it


  • Patched Up Ragdoll
    December 21, 2006

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    Awww Kari that was beautifulllllllll!! Wow! God you are such an amazing writer.


    • Kari gold member
      December 21, 2006
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      awwwww Thank you sweetheart

  • SithHappens
    December 21, 2006
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    Whoa

    Great poem Kari, full of sorrow and hope all at once. I hate to mention a few misspellings, but they're simple ones that don't really detract from the poem's feeling. Wonderfully done Kari, like usual

    ~Sith


    • Kari gold member
      December 21, 2006
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      Can you please tell me the misspellings so I can correct them
      I really appreciate your comment hun

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